Shaking here,
on this lonely bridge.
I cant help but cry,
And scream.
My agony is to much to bear.
I have lost feeling,
and control.
I cant last this way,
its to late for me.
I have been cursed,
Damned,
HuRt.
I cant live anymore,
I am to blank.
my stare isnt there,
I cant see,
because all i see is him.
He left me and now i am leaveing him.
As i am standing,
on this lonely bridge.
I open my eyes,
and look twords the north,
My imagination has played out my life,
my death.
My happiness faded,
and I have to go,
because what once was,
isnt anymore.
And right befor i jumped,
I swear i saw his face,
crying his car.
As i FALL from this lonely bridge.
Author notes
This is about me commiting suicide....umm the poem/story says it all...this is how i feel when i think about suicide....and stuff...you know....the "HIM" is my dad...
...SHOULD I ?
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after reading some of your work i just have one major comment. if you are suicidal i think your doing it for your dad. like i think its your way of getting attention from him. i did it for my whole family to pay attention to me in a way. this isn't the right way to do it if it is what your trying to do.
but once again. wonderful poem. i like it a lot. its dark, and sad, and def suicidal. -
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...it may be for my dad...good point...but its not for attention...I cant control my impulses....I have an upper sever case of depression...and we are trying to get me help...but non of the meds are working...i think ima end up in a hospital...
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wow. this poem is powerful. i can tell u put alot of emotion, pain, and maybe tears into it. =]
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I'm in tears, I can feel the pain and sorrow in this poem. I'm pulling myself away from reading it again cuz now the screens blurring up all the more... pain happens sweetheart, you have a gift with words to touch souls so don't waste it away by committing suicide. All will get better, time heals and fades the scars. Best of luck in your life.
Great poem!
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good poem
no u should not commit suicide there are so many people who understand what u going through and who will tell you to keep on living. DONT DIE. lots of love and best wishes.
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