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Severed beauty

 

 

songs they sang

were sung no more as death came upon

thy door

they'd kneel in fright and lose all sight
on the marble stone

silence died as children cried
left here all alone

the sun would come a thousand days
to wash away the pain

snubbing out all memory of songs

that they once sang

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Rend the Veil gold member
    November 22
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    oh my friend,
    your words tug at a place
    I keep hidden , for fear of invoking memories
    but too late... I have traveled back to a place
    that burns deep and filled with tears of a child
    not yet dried by the sun, but covered with forgiveness
    non the less,

    love this write Tony
    you always seem to capture
    a piece of what I have experienced
    in my own life, I hope this makes
    sense to you,

    love and blessings

    Rend


  • daffodilblossom
    September 11
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    my first impression...

    why havent i read your work sooner im looking forward to reading even more great read very powerful


  • Desire gold member
    August 31

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    Wow~

    This swells the eyes and such a sad picture
    painted my Friend~
    Powerful with Emotions like all Your writes
    They pull the reader in~ Oy~~
    Another Excellent take on the prompt
    Keep that quill dancing~ Yay!

    Thank You for sharing Your Voice
    Best wishes in the contest
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Rose Angel gold member
    August 26

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    You evoked such emotions with your write here friend...Vivid imagery as I see those children, without a song, afraid and alone shut away....My you do have the gift to portray feeling in your choice of words...The rhyme and flow is beautiful as well! Bravo!


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    August 24

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    Such sadness comes in the loss of song - children's song. Wonderfully soft rhyme in this tender tune. Beautiful poetry. ~Pamela


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    August 24

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    Beautiful write, sad and very powerful~
    Many blessings
    and best wishes...
    ~A~


  • Jesann gold member
    August 23

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    Sad...as though the grief tangibly lingers in the air, through your words.

    "the sun would come a thousand days
    to wash away the pain"
    Very well written.
    Wonderful take on the prompt.


  • estbelle gold member
    August 23

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    "they'd kneel in fright and lose all sight
    on the marble stone"

    "silence died as children cried
    left here all alone"


    I love how you constructed these lines
    brilliant


  • Nicolette gold member
    August 23

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    i could feel this poem. such a soft voice you have and what impact you achieve, my friend. beautifully expressed.

    ~ Nicolette


  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    August 23

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    happy to see a piece from you again! this evokes sadness.... such a powerful emotion. loved it, tony....


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    August 22

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    A lovely piece you painted here.
    As always dear one you nailed the prompt

    Good luck

    Passions


  • Cannonsfire
    August 22

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    Such a sad picture you painted here, it's a tangible feeling of having viewed it through your pen and eyes. Glad to see a new one from you C


  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    August 22

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    sad
    "silence died as children cried
    left here all alone"

    when death takes a love one, the loneliness and loss we feel.

    Great write.

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