Purple hats on butterflies
turns heads as mosquito's fly.
Clapping at the sounds of crickets laughing
all the flies are dancing.
Pretty flowers from a loving cockroach
to the most sophisticated beetle wearing a broach.
Mr. Moth is yawning
woken by a maggot to early in the morning.
Albino grasshopper gets approval
from the incredibly handsome stunt weevil.
Ants with umbrellas running towards the trees
big hairy spider coming up behind about to sneeze.
It's a whole little world out there
right under our nose,
think about it every time you
stub your toes.
Author notes
Absolute non sense poem....my first one and it was fun...blah blah blah...invasion of the babble bat.
Written April 1st, 2004
What did you think
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Sounds like a poem from "Honey! I Shrunk the Universe" What a weird microcosm living just out of our attention span. I heard a buzz in the Pub window the other day. I went and watched in fascination as a Daddy-Long Leg Spider nabbed and wrapped a fly in the web. How intriguing it all is, but the fly was not a plumber.
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Very cute. Has the simplicity and wonderment of a child looking at the insect world. The only stanza that might use some improvement is
Mr. Moth is yawning
he's been woken by a maggot to early in the morning.
may read better as
Mr. Moth is yawning
woken by a maggot to early in the morning.
I think making second line a continuation of the first rather than a complete sentence of it's own keeps the flow of the rest of the poem.
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Very cute! A child would go crazy with this poem and probably have lots of questions such as: "Why did the butterfly choose the purple hat"
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Wonderful nonsense here. Made me smile. Love the fact that your nonsense breaks out into a final stanza with depth and meaning. It makes the nonsense even better. Thanks for sharing this piece! Great write! ~Erin~
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This is a really nice little poem. If an "Angry Amazon" can call something adorable and mean it as a compliment, you should give yourself a little pat on the back. Nonsense poetry IS true poetry.
May your roaches stay outside, and mosquitoes steer thee wide,
Brian -
good........
<~~~ i love that background!! yea they have some new backgrounds. ive only used one! o and my favorite insect is....butterfly....
have a nice day and float with the bugs (lol i dont know what im talkin about!!!),
manda -
How totally adorable!! The meter and flow went along quite smoothly...the only thing I'd recommend is to correct some typing and grammatical errors within the poem. You did such a good job, I hate to see something like that take away from it. Thanks so much for posting that...it was much enjoyed!
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Strange topic, but good write. I didn't think someone could write a poem about insects. Well, you did it. Good write, not going to take up anymore of your space or time, just thought that i should comment on your piece seeing as how I ckilcked on it in the featured items box.
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Sometimes what we view as "non-sense" poetry is the best poetry of all. To imagine bugs wearing hats and broaches and what their world must be like is truly amusing and brings a smile to the face. There is never anything wrong with a smile.
Victoria Lin -
That's exactly what I meant sweet ....well done....thanks for your excellent comment...DALI
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wonderful
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im surprised you dont like it so much cause personally i think its down right funny.and i also kinda saw something more in it.the last stanza made me think that we never stop to appreciate the small things in life which is a big shame. i dont know if it was intentional or not but thats how i saw it!
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lol
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