We all do and afraid to admit for we may look foolish
Some one says something to offend one
The mind comes back later whisper feeling from the heart
Some times I wonder maybe this is sign of a true artist
In those utterances in enlightenment tricks us to write about them
When one grows old it is nonsense
As a child it far more acceptable
Then as we grow it fades away
Wanting to come out
What we others think
It for children not adults
Why do those think they are lost
Child like adventure is more fun then money can buy
Life is too short to be grumpy
A contest entry
- Oh, Just Take a Peek... by Susan E. Pennycuff.
700 points, ended August 24, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Amen
I have caught myself at times needing to give myself an attitude adjustment and instead of fussing over things to laugh and say well Im still here and able to choose not to fuss but enjoy life to its fulllest usually the sad thogughts just drift away
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I Hear Ya!!
Heck why be Grumpy... I am not one of the Seven Dwarfs
I used to tell myself...
Love how You penned this with that Message~
for there are some Grumpies out there who could use a
Lift...bring about a smile
I am reminded of Oscar the Grouch
from Sesame Street...boy he used to have me rolling on the
floor with laughter
Thank You for sharing Your Voice
Best wishes in the contest
with love & light~ Desire~*~
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I had sent a message out asking everyone to edit their entries and I was hoping that this was one of them that was going to be edited but I can see that it has not been, I am really sorry that it has not because it would have raised it to a higher standard. There are a few errors in this write that simply cannot be overlooked during judging with so many other perfectly written pieces entered.
However, having said that, I will judge fairly based on what is before me.
Your scores:
Initial Impact/Reaction 7/10
Originality of content 9/10
Quality of Form 8/10
Overall Flow/Syllables 7/10
Ideas/Metaphors/Imagery 8/10
Poetic Device/Verbiage 7/10
Cohesion 8/10
Understandable/Makes sense 8 /10
Overall poetic effort 3/5
Emotion/Personality/Edge 3/5
Last impact/reaction 7/10
Overall score: 75 /100
Thank you for entering my contest and good luck, it was my pleasure to read and review this write.
Suzi
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Very nice message and so true. Had a little trouble with the second verse, fifth line. So glad I have reached that age. lol Good luck in the contest. God bless.
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Words gained from traveling down the road of life and observing human nature and interactions. These words ring true and show maturity, once we reach a certain age we stop worring about what others might think and remain and act truer to our own feelings. Thanks for sharing this thoughtful piece, but perhaps a bit of proof reading would improve it.
Brother Dennis
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Haiku-bless-you
My life has been not so good this year. I been helping a friend who has a seizure disorder. She had one at the hospital so I stayed with her then the next day they sent her home.
thanks for reading it
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Once again, very wise words! I love this one! Now this is one that every adult, over age 20 should see, and take to heart! Great job on this one! What a read!
Best of luck in this contest!!
and love
Nyetta
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