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The Wind's Whisper

Winds swirl around deserted ruins.
Silence enhances the new morning.
Temples and domes dot the landscape.
Breathing in, and breathing out, a gift.

The rising sun and its rays breathtaking in its view.
Smokeless fog traps you inside its depth.
A quiet stream's trinkle a soothing sound; its mist a blanket.
One last breeze rests on your cheek, like a kiss, then disappears.

The air settles as the darkened moon reflects its light.
What beauty this is! An elemental reward for each breath drawn.
This is what makes the lustrous trees and green grass sway.
It disappears during the calm night, and starts its cycle all over again.



Author notes

Prompt Three-Air

"The beauty of the morning; silent, bare,
Ships, towers, domes, theatres and temples lie
Open unto the fields and to the sky
All bright and glittering in the smokeless air"-William Wordsworth

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  • kerrypn
    September 9

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    This is a fantastic response to the prompt, I love the way you have used to subtle references to the original, "domes" and "smokeless". The whole poem is vivid and brings the scene to life. I think the gentle tone you have created works really well and the flow of thought is fantastic throughout. Really well thought out and controlled. Very much enjoyed reading this. Thank you for entering and best of luck in the contest.


  • Samhuinn
    August 25

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    I wish I had half the creative output you have xD
    Keep up the pace, and you'll be able to fill up a whole shelf in my cupboard ^_\\


  • Rick Weston silver member
    August 24

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    nicely done. I particularly like 'One last breeze rests on your cheek, like a kiss, then disappears' - good job.


  • Intoxicated Dreams
    August 23

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    wow megan, this was beautifully written. excellent:]

  • danny143
    August 23
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    very nice write, love it!


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    August 23

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    Beautifully done!!!

    Soft, gentle narrative with wonderful imagery & depth that enthrals throughout...
    Keep up the good work & good luck in your contest...
    Well done!!!


  • Lady Michaella
    August 22

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    oh wow.. this is beautiful. very nicely written. i can imagine all of your descriptions in my mind as i was reading this which is hard to do for me.

    favorite lines:

    'The rising sun and its rays breathtaking in its view.
    Smokeless fog traps you inside its depth.
    A quiet stream's trinkle a soothing sound; its mist a blanket.
    One last breeze rests on your cheek, like a kiss, then disappears.'

    beautiful work
    best of luck in the contest

    xx

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