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Tridents in My Soup

 

Yet they all came before me in a hot appetizer- in an over-sized bowl of Minestrone soup,
but I had already filled up on thirteen croissants, and twelve well-baked, toasty delectable buns;
and so my mind drifted off, my appetite full, while I played with the fare 'til my hunger regrouped.


A mighty ocean with Neptune atop a typhoon, his trident raised high (my spoon in the goop)
flailing all before him, whether cannoned or gunned, clashing with mortals (the fool-hearty ones)

yet they all came before me in a hot appetizer- in an over-sized bowl of Minestrone soup.

The krakens and hydra and fishwives who nagged were blown away by Zephyrs whose violence took root;

with trident aglow I hunted new foe... when a mermaid appeared, too lovely, too young;

and so my mind drifted off, my appetite full, while I played with the fare 'til my hunger regrouped.

On the waves of a phalanx that drove ahead troops toward battle and chaos ‘round the mermaid’s new sloop

that raced through warships, battle formations flung from the depths of trenches formed before hell hath begun;

yet they all came before me in a hot appetizer- in an over-sized bowl of Minestrone soup.

The mythic gods raged, my carrots and potatoes engaged the tomatoes and celery shoots;
the ocean heaved, ship bells rung, their cannons shot true, great god-clouds sung;
and so my mind drifted off, my appetite full, while I played with the fare 'til my hunger regrouped.

The heroes are immortals now, they’ve journeyed the loop from Earth back to Heaven via Guadeloupe

thus bringing an end to my fabled regale with one very big mess from this restaurant fun;
yet they all came before me in a hot appetizer- in an over-sized bowl of Minestrone soup

and so my mind drifted off, my appetite full, while I played with the fare 'til my hunger regrouped.

 

 

 

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  • ecrivain01
    August 24
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    Delightful read ...

    and definitely a first rate take off on the prompt.

    Thanks for entering.

  • Purrsanthema
    August 23

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    This is very very silly, and very very fun, and very very enyoyable, and very very delightful. Where is that restaurant?
    13 croissants?


    • wbiro gold member
      August 24
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      It's the restaurant down the highway- first you get to Bird in Hand, then you find yourself in Intercourse, and once you're reached Blue Balls, you're almost in Paradise... (a trucker's favorite Route through the Keystone State... lol you had to ask! )

  • Bad Bill
    August 22

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    This has got to be the most unusual villanelle I've ever encountered. It's so metrically and rhythmically skewed that it baffles me how it works - but it does! It's actually a cleverly amusing parody of the conventional villanelle. Radical shit, man. I like it muchly.

    Good one,
    Bill

    • wbiro gold member
      August 22
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      This IS a Villanelle!

      yes, I took no liberties with any rules - this IS a Villanelle...! (as far as rhymes, I did use a near-rhyme here and there just for color... as the form rule doesn't specify 'exact' rhyme...)
      but ok... maybe the lines ARE unusually long...

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