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WhereTile.(Triolet)

Where oh where are my missing tile
Without them my life is bare
Quite commonplace,lacking style
Where oh where are my missing tile
Malaise, woe continues to pile
Sadly, no one seems to care
Where oh where are my missing tile
Without them my life is bare

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  • Desire gold member
    August 26

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    Thank You!

    Thank You for Your entry: WhereTile.(Triolet)
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit and after reading several times ~
    I'm Honored also Humbled You took the time to pen for my contest
    You took the prompt and brought forth much for the Mind to feast upon~
    Bravo!! When I digest words written, images come through that grab hard~
    Woven Strengths: Oooooh Love the form~
    While reading, I kept being shown this movie snippet I believe it is Creepshow...and it has Andrienne Barbeau in it...
    The emphasis on her Character also what happens in the end~
    Oy The Crate is what the *episode* was...
    I am shown Leatherface also for some reason~
    and reference to 1972
    However that is to be Interpreted.
    You give the Reader much to think about
    Love the direction You took with this prompt
    Hopefully my comment to Your write makes sense
    Powerful verse and message You have brought forth

    These words grabbed and pulled~
    Malaise, woe continues to pile
    Sadly, no one seems to care
    Vivid Imagery poured in these lines...

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Voice
    also best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Many blessings too
    with much love and light~ Desire~*~


  • mysticstorm gold member
    August 25
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    Great for and flow...I like the referrence to tile as messing pieces...very creative and interesting.

    mystic


  • Commodore Rouge
    August 23

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    Interesting. I'm not really sure what you mean by "tile", but perhaps it's just me. Anyway, I really like the flow that this poem has, and the rhythm is great. In a way, your style reminds me of Shel Silverstein.