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Kudos

I let you in my life
Because you had a beautiful way with words.
I let you take my heart
Because you said you’d hold it firm.

I let you have it all
And you threw it on the ground
There were too many pieces,
so I left them as I found
I thought you’d make the problems go away
But you only helped me bleed.
And so it came to be

A little cut here and there
And now they’re slivers away from bone
A few pills here, a few pills there
And now the bottles, in one day - gone.
You used to seem so perfect
Until you threw away the mask
Now I wonder how
I didn’t see its crack.
You held me up so high
To only watch me fall
How could I not see the games you were playing
How could I be so dull
Kudos to you for picking such a fool
But I guess it's better I know,
And believe me,

It won't go untold.  

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  • carlyrae
    August 23

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    Noice

    No ' in bottles frien.
    Line 18 is know supposed to be now?

    The beginning and ending have really nice flow but I think by replacing some words in the middle or something the whole poem could flow better together. I really like it though; the title fits so well into the poem. And it seems like a lot of people can relate to it