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Though I'm Alone

The morning is cold
And it creeps down my spine.
The sun is only beginning to rise
And already inside I’m burning.
People are still happily dreaming
Whereas the feeling that I’m not really here
But everyone sees me, is infact, a reality
As I haven’t slept for days.
My problems are continuously blooming
And my emotional and physical wounds aren’t healing.
I wish they would stop screaming
So again I’ll resort to the only thing
That will make them whisper at least.
The blade paints such precise lines
And the strokes of red
Have made my day a bit more bright.
You think I’m crazy, but
Does it help if I say I didn’t feel a thing?
You won’t understand because
While your glass is full,
Mines more than empty.
I’m all alone in a world overly populated with
Many of my kind.
We’re numb and we’ll do anything
To drive the “empty” away.
And though I may not feel pain, I know my heart’s silently aching
There’s no more strings to pull
As they've all been left dangling
So I’ll live my life, though full of regret
I’ll live my life with all my scars
I’ll live my life knowing you’ll never understand
Because though I’m all alone
I know there’s many of
My own

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  • carlyrae
    August 23

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    Beautiful

    Your poem is so good and I can't really find anything wrong with it. The only thing I can say is that I would change a bit of the wording in lines 6-7 and line 13 where it says "That will make them at least whisper" I would change it by putting ..them a whisper at least. But I don't know it's really good, if you don't change those things its still a great poem. I hope it helps


  • XRainbowliciousX
    August 22

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    If this is really about you and how you feel...You can talk to me if you need someone. I know a lot of ppl say that, but i'll do whatever I can. I''ve been the one wanting the "empty" feelings to go away and I still get that way sometimes....but i'm not going to give you a whole lot of stuff right now.

    I like your ending. Hmm...i'm not exactly sure what you could do to make it better. I enjoyed it. I think you did a good job with the cutting aspect...because most ppl think it's so stupid to put i cut myself... and you made it sound like it was beautiful.

    good write.