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Jumped the Thunder

Unstained tears landed

on the cold echo.

Played as hollow gazed

a shadow pavement, watering

a seed, between cracks

jumped the thunder crossing

a sky. The empty space tagged.

 

Author notes

Prompt: "playing hopscotch with shadows"

A contest entry

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  • Barry Hodges
    August 25

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    You used the prompt quite creatively I do believe. It is tempting to enter this contest except it has already ended. Read my poems and you'll find out what a lucky escape the contest holder had!

  • msjuicytech
    August 25

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    I think this is interesting. I would just suggest a comma in the first line, I think based off your style you meant to put one there.


  • crivanea silver member
    August 22
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    stunning

    • kendhal22
      August 22
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      Thank you

      Thank you for the wonderful comment given to poem. Peace and love. Kendhal22