Why do i feel like we are drifting apart
I feel a hole deep inside my heart
This emptiness wont seem to go away
All I want to do is listen to what you have to say
But there is this block in my mind
like a constant wall i hide behind
I need someone to help me tear it down
im tired of having to wear this frown
I want to be happy...
I long to be free
someone help me... all i want is to be ME!
Please tell me what you think
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Hey that's sad, but well-expressed. The rhyming is fine, and the idea creates the image of a lonely dungeon of thought in which you are trapped.
"I'm tired of having to wear this frown" shows that there is something troubling you which is hidden from all and perhaps you, but it is not revealed in this piece.
Nicely written, and full of emotion. It is something that many people would feel at some point in their lives.
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you are pretty good at reading and dissecting poems apparently... ha but thanks i was a little unsure about it
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