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Crumbling

Our walls are crumbling.
Everything is caving in.
They took months to build,
Now all our hard work is crashing.
Am I the only one seeing this?
I feel so alone,
Surrounded by everyone.
Running is easy...
But you can't hide from yourself.
There is no escape.

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not done yet i guess. idk :/

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  • Calvin Ironfist
    August 22, 2009

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    I can feel the dire haste of the speaker as the walls are crumbling fast.

    I like how it visualizes moments of hard work sometimes falling apart after all that's been done for it.