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The Abstract Animal.

Everyone deserves everything.
People want this, they get that.
Even if they’re a no good fucking rat.

You will reap what you sow,
So take what you want and go.
God is more than a myth,
One day you will recognize this.

Humans are dirty animals,
They rape.
They steal.
They lie.
They kill.

Who is bad?
That question the good ask,
Always makes one sad.

What is a friend?
I don’t know anymore,
Everyone has a price to sell out
Everyone is a whore.

Who is the devil?
No ones sure,
But I’m damn sure
You’re on his level.

Good vs. Evil
They fight everyday.
When will this battle
End?
Not today.

Author notes

An old friend of mine did something horrible to my ex-girlfriend when we were dating. An old friend of mine broke into my best friends house. People are sick, cruel, dirty animals, there are no animals as cruel as we are.

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  • Tzipora
    August 24

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    You will reap what you sow,
    So take what you want and go.
    God is more than a myth,
    One day you will recognize this.


    - loved that part. sounds like someone ranting. but you said it in a much more...meaningful way. yea thats it.

    i liked this write alot. it was like catchy. it all flowed well.


    • sinkfloridasink
      August 24
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      yeah i haven't written anything in a while, this was most definatly coming off of a rant, but I tried to do it gracefully...and thank you I was trying to go for that


  • swim.x
    August 21

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    You will reap what you sow,
    So take what you want and go.
    - woah. your rhyme is great - it packs its punch without the cliche.

    When will this battle
    End?
    Not today.
    - ending = boom.

    you kept me thinking the whole way through. some parts i agree with, others i dont, but i get what you're saying, and it's sad. it's so fucking sad because it's so true.

    xx


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    August 21
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    humanity is ugly. enough said.