You stand in my doorway and declare that
I,
I of all people are incapable of love!
You climb up my drain pipe and announce to the mighty council
That you alone
Dream
You alone have felt desire to reach out
To touch the brightest star
That burned out countless centuries before your birth
You failed to notice
[Or perhaps you didn't care to know]
That I was curled up fetus-like sobbing, on your rug
In shadow of what lies upon your mantel piece
Not to mention the vast mirror in witch you so delightfully gaze in
Enchanted by the "beauty" that looked back at you [evidently charmed]
As I lay
Whimpering
Shivering & shaking
Clenching your trousers
Yet again you failed to notice how my soul spilled all over your carpet
My regurgitated heart throbbing at your feet
Fooled again
Again I was stuck in this house of torments I could never forsake
Without it I was nothing....
Within those walls I was nothing but
A dreamer...
Within those walls
My undivided attention was yours
But you would never even look at me
For you had only eyes for the many whores who sought naught but lust from you
Again and again
I watched as they trampled
Upon your brusied heart
Silently observing I knew that I would have kept you safe
But it would never have pleased you
And that is all that mattered to me....
For months all I ever did was dwell upon.....dreams
And here you stand today and define the meaning of love
As if I
have
no clue
Author notes
Shallow bastard
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A very expressive piece
full of raw emotion and great imagery
my fav line..'Yet again you failed to notice how my soul spilled all over your carpet...'
I have no critique other than the few typos/mispellings...
I really enjoyed this ....
Thank you for sharing
and best wishes!!!
~Pastel
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So glad that you can relate
Please can you help me out with the spelling errors -
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Sure
you only had a few
... here is the correct spelling.
'declare'
'centuries'
'piece'
'evidently'
'bruised'
'upon'
'which'
I hope this helps.. My spell check doesn't work half the time so I know how it is..
P>S Love the piece..
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awww thankyou x
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You're welcome
and thank you for sharing
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what the hell are you talking about, this is shit?? This is fucking amazing, and I, indeed have been in this spot so many times before. I absolutely loved it!!!
Great job
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really nice job, it was a fantastic read and i loved how you formatted the piece. other than some spelling errors it was absolutely fantastic. i can see what you mean when i read this and i can see the imagery packed into the piece. your title really relates to the rest of the poem. nice job and keep it up
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This was really good. No really. I could see what you ment here. It was worth the read. Good write. But you spelled capable wrong.
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Oh thankyou so much for the spelling advice! its uslually somthing that I stumble on
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it was an awesome poem, good use of language, good flow. very romantic, and dark.
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Just perfectly written well done words used are superb
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this isnt shit. i really like it. its very expressive. great write.
~destiny
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This poem wasn't shit at all Em,
I found it very descriptive in many ways and thought it was emotional in every way just like your other poems. I really agree with the comments below about the imaginary in this piece. Hope you're okays anyway. Keep it up!
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This was a great write. There is so much imagery and emotion in this piece, wow. Keep up the good work
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Thankyou and I love your username!
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wow
wow that is so deep so much pain and feelings i felt like i was there such a good poem i love ot
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FREAKING AMAZING!!!
one of the best poems i've read in a long time emily keep up the good work. heck, if you keep this up, you might surpass me
and i'm one step from being famous
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This was really good, I liked it.
It had great imagery to it.
The flow was amazing. The style was
great.
I'll give you
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This is good emily ^^
i likes it muchly <3
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Thankyoo!
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