Anger comes,
My fists Clench,
Looking for a way out,
Anger through a pen,
I find the nessesscity's,
And the block comes,
I just say: "And?",
And write what comes to mind,
Two lines of word,
Then a space,
Over and over,
Until i feel calm again,
Hence, The poems are born.
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Hmmm...interesting. Inspiration about inspiration. I like
This is what I love about simple poems. They're just so freaking easy to read. I appreciate the unique quality of this write, as many poems nowadays are written about love. Kudos muchly to you
Just got some quick grammatical issues I'm gonna point out...
There is something about the usage of commas after every line that becomes sort of repetitive...I suggest that you perhaps use ellipses (the "..."'s) after one or two of the opening lines.
1st stanza: "De-capitalize" the "C" in "clench
3rd stanza: "nessesscity's" -> necessities
4th stanza: I just recommend that you change the beginning of the second line to "Then I..." instead of "and"
5th stanza: Perhaps you could explain this line a bit more? Two lines of a word does not quite make sense in my mind.
6th stanza: Capitalize "I"
Final line: Capitalize the "P" in poems, or change "The" to "the"
Once again, this is an awesome write and a very, very unique idea. Keep writing! Can't wait to see your unique style burst forth and astound the freaking pants off of us
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