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Crucified

Why are we all so very blind
To His unending pain
When all He ever did for us
Was give His life away

And how are we supposed to see
If closed our eyes remain
To the suffering our Lord must do
Each time we turn away

Each little sin we work each day
Seems awful not to us
But is to Jesus on the cross
A heavy burden borne

Whenever people hate and sin
This evil, this divide
Brings such great pain and agony
He's each time crucified

He cries out loud for us to hear
"I give My life for you!"
But we hear not, for we are caught
In worldly things instead

Our sins not only cause Him pain
But strengthen those as well
Who only gain from evil ways
And wish to do us harm

The sky turns black, the world dies out
We blame technology
"Advancements," global warming and
Pollution from machines

With every little sin we make
Dark forces gather strength
Responsibility must fall
Upon us for our fate

The wars and violence of late
Encouraged by our foe
Have escalated due to us
Our pride, our sin, our shame

Natural disasters now
Have become frequent things
Does no one see that even now
They're caused by our disgrace?

But the sky's turned black before
The earth, it shook with grief
When Jesus gave his life for us
On Calvary one day

For Jesus ever loves us so
Despite our sinful deeds
And knows that in our hearts remain
A little decency

Our Lord gave up His everything
His love, His life, His pain
So we could one day do the same
Our new life to attain

Author notes

Picture prompt, of Jesus' crucifixion--Trekkergirl's contest.

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Comments


  • trekkergirl
    September 19

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    Very nice write with a very strong message... yes, Jesus does love us no matter what our sins. Thanks for sharing this message with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.

  • Vera Rich
    September 6

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    PLEASE... do correct the error in your "Author's note".

    This piece is NOT in "free verse", it is in regular unrhymed iambic tetrameters arranged in quatrains.

    The term "free verse" normally refers to the RHYTHM of the poem - not to the rhyme. It is quite possible to write RHYMED free verse.

    (Personally, my advice would be to throw out the "Author's note" completely, and let the poem deliver its message by itself.

    To my mind, this kind of explanation of why a writer wrote a particular piece and what it means shows a lack of confidence in his/her work, as if it needed some kind of crutch.

    And your piece has so strong a message that explanations are not necessary!)

    But if you must keep the note, please change the reference to "free verse" - since it is out of place here.

    I apologize if this seems pernickety - but I do feel that it is important in a poet not only to master the techniques of the craft, but also to be able to discuss them correctly.


    • Radiance
      September 7
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      Thank you so much for commenting! I wasn't sure what exactly to call my poem, so your advice was extremely helpful. I'm not entirely familiar with all of the terminology yet. Thank you again!


  • John Faulkner gold member
    September 5

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    This is very thought provoking..a beautifull piece..straight from your heart..I can feel it.This is a wonderfull message for all to read..I agree with your thoughts..I share them.I read this twice..it was so good..Keep writing.I can see your talent coming alive..Stay true to it,

    God Bless,

    John