I will try to say this,
the best way I know how
In simple English best I can,
right here and right now
You’re a very special person,
who means the world to me
No other could ever take your place,
or make me feel so free
You’re the wind that carries
the birds above
To their precious nest
that’s full of giving love
You’re the drop of rain that falls
on a sun scorched face
The irresistible smile
that can’t be replaced
You’re the baby’s step
that takes every mothers breathe away
These precious love thoughts
I carry with me every day
In simple English
I’m trying my best to say
I have and always will
love you my child, in Oh, so many ways
Written and Composed By:
Nancy Bailey-Whitmore-Shields
Copyright 2009
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The love we have for our children is sometimes hard to put into words.
In simple English you've done it well. -
Great!!!!!
I'm guessing you wrote that to your child. Beautiful way to express your feelings to them and that'll last forever. kudo's
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IN SIMPLE ENGLISH
Thank you so much for taking the time to share your thoughts on my work. Your compliments are greatly appreciated. Thanks Again! Nancy
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lovely rythm and melody in this write...
"You’re the baby’s step
that takes every mothers breathe away
These precious love thoughts
I carry with me every day
In simple English
I’m trying my best to say
I have and always will
love you my child, in Oh, so many ways"
very touching. It actually brings a tear to my eye.
very well done.
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Isn't that the truth? When I think about those precious moments, so many words come to surfus that I just want to put on paper so I will always remember them. Thanks for the time you shared and your much appreciated, beautiful compliment. Nancy
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Awesome write.. reading this I felt like everything I want to say to my children you put in this very well worded masterpiece.. Welcome o the group and thanks for sharing your words of enlightenment with me.. I look forward to reading more from you.
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In Simple English
Thanks for the incouragment and words of praise. I hope to improve as I go along. Again, Thanks! Nancy
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A great sense of rhythm until the short line that jars "the birds above ". It needs an extra word like flying/hovering/sailing/gliding/singing. I am sure you can think of more.
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In Simple English
Thanks! Healthy critisisim is more than welcome, it serves to create a more inviting poem. Thanks for the rythym noted in these words of love. Nancy
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