A lady
In red
Vibrant against
The pale
Porcelain frame
A man
Caresses her
Gently
In black
He fades behind
Author notes
Made for a contest,
Prompt: Porcelain pictures
Picture found on Google: http://photo.net/photodb/photo?photo_id=3200355
A contest entry
- QUICKIE; (PIF) by HereComesTheSun.
850 points, ended August 22, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Hope you like it, Hard to make it interesting in a small amount :)
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good job.
A very well expressed poem . good job. -
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the last stanza is a little off when read
the line he fades behind isnt a ending it lines it kinda leaves the stanza with a half written feel. -
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Thx for the criticism but I felt that this is as good as i could do with only 20 words, I'm used to getting the message across in far more words. To me, 20 words cannot accurately show my true thoughts.
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"A lady
In red"
"A man
In black" -
beautiful imagery my friend...
wonderful short poem for such a nice picture...
You can read my poem that has similar meaning:
http://allpoetry.com/poem/5566239
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Dark poem..mysterious..almost sensual...I sense a deep emotion going on here..You have me thinking..which I like in poetry.You did a marvelous job with so few words.I really enjoyed this..I can see your talent in this one..Take a bow
John
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