My Darling Child, so sweet and free,
How can anyone do this to thee?
To be carried off in an awful attack
And only time can get you back.
Dearest Mother, do not fear.
I will only be away for half the year.
After it's back to your sweet embrace
Upon the glowing earthly face.
My Darling Child, how do you fair
in the in a world with a cold and sullen air?
Dearest Mother, though there I cannot thrive
Your warming spirit keeps me alive.
My Darling Child, when you're home
My wrinkles will go and wheat will be sown.
I'll be waiting for you upon the lee.
Your Darling Child, Persephone.
Author notes
I chose option 3 for my entry. It shows a series of letters between the Greek godesses Demeter and Persephone. For more information, go to this myth. http://www.mythicarts.com/writing/Persephone.html
A contest entry
- August New Member Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended September 6, 59 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Welcome to AllPoetry!
I like the onterwoven interaction in this write. Your thoughts and take on the picture worked wonderfully. Of course, I just simply enjoy Greek mythology. Well done.
Welcome to AP and good luck
Storm
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I loved this
I loved the interpretaion of the picture and the personal twist on this classic myth. Great job!
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welcome to allpoetry
Oh very nice. I like where you let the picture take your thoughts. It works wonderfully.
Thank you for sharing.
Best of luck to you.
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Welcome to All Poetry
You have written this poem well
thank you for following the rules and for taking oart in the contest. Good luck..
Cheers,
Archana
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welcome to all poetry
Persephone had quite the role in my last King book I read, very chilling. Nice write
♥
shawna
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Welcome to All Poetry~
This poem took me back to my early academic days when we learned the mythologies and how they affected literature. This is very good!
I like the classic tone within the poem and the 'hook' at the end.
*Suggestions*
The form, for the sake of the letters, steps off a little due to the couplets. I wonder if only the last couplet would be needed to open the idea you intended. Not sure how to do that.
A very good entry. Thank you! Warmly, CookieZeal/Site Greeter
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