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Dora Maar

I alone am lonely

that is a thought I often have

I alone immortal
barren and bleeding

A river flows
weeping exquisite distance
through solitary years elusive

only lending poignancy
to the portrait 

of haunted autumn watercolours
dripping on a summer horizon

and the colour of the sun on scared skin.     

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  • donnz
    October 5

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    I hear that

    Surrounded by millions in the BIG city
    Oftimes I feel to be the only one,
    Especially as 'Fall comes.

  • Judith Chandler
    August 28

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    We all feel that at times. Interesting take on the prompt.

    Thank you for entering my contest.


  • just mercedes gold member
    August 23

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    Beautiful descriptive language. I loved the sound of 'haunted autumn watercolours' particularly. I was taken to the 'gilded' portrait.