~ i ~
Torso face down,legs severed...
Thick spikes through sockets...
Bound to rusted metal device...
Withering muscle,rotting skin...
Rotting to such perfection therein...
~ ii ~
Body at excruciating angle...
Arms pulled back, hooks in upper mouth...
Large hook through bottom of mandible...
Curling, emerging past teeth...
Exquisite puncture, blood complimenting grime...
This body has decayed beautifully over time...
~ iii ~
Core sitting upright and neat...
Skin, by hooks, peeled away from the back...
Revealing bloody spine,adorned with muscle...
Unveiled spine, symmetric arrangement...
Splashed with blood, brings to mind contentment..
~ iv ~
Masterpiece perpendicular...
Skin peeled back and nailed away...
Messy pile of innards below...
Glistening in the air of mutilation...
As they shrink and putrefy in deterioration...
~ v ~
Sentinels heads in barbed wire, suffocatingly wrapped...
Bound by their arms, limbs entrapped...
Sounds of scrapping metal bend around sanity...
Orchestrating nightmares, for the eyes to see.
Author notes
Beautiful...
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Comments
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it is beautiful....very beautiful.
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The instruments of your orchestra are finely tuned indeed. Stringed instruments of twined gut and ribcage percussion of your imagery is peerless. So vividly painting the images that disurb yet somehow draw the reader in, to see it all in its ghastly glory.
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This is gross, but the imagery is phenomenal. It's enough to make anyone sick to their stomachs..wonderful job.
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Intensly written, I adored this very much. It reached out into the depths of my mind with wonders of lost mourns. As they say Beautifully written.
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Beautifully sick! Wowza! I do really really like this hun! Love this layout too! The rhyme and rhythm woz very goood! X x Welldone
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yes indeedy, that was pretty much disgusting...lol
ya know, I have this doctor friend..
I just have one question...
how do you take your steak?
there used to be this television show here called Elvira, mistress of the dark. she'd show the most disgusting, strange movies. this would play right in there.
and so what do you do for fun?
sigh, okay so much for an intelligent comment.
love,
jin
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i like this. it is so beautiful. the pian and the gore in this poem would disgust some people, but to me, this is so well written. its amazing. its ... there arent any words to describe how much i love this poem. another great written. very very well done.
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Wow. Beautiful for sure. This was stunning! Why do I keep repeating myself?? Seriously. If I keep bombarding you with stunnings and amazings you might start to get tired of it...
But still...
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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I could see this happening to one I used to hold dear......by my own hands. I would get such joy out of hearing his cries for mercy. Though I have to say I have never done this to him in another life, he has had similar tortures.
And deserved every one.
Nicely done!
vampi
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Wow... I mean the human body can be so beautiful, this brought to mind a work of art... the way it was described with... passion, reverence, and enthusiasm... :0) Something that although I can't see was right in front of me... even the person describing it... I could just picture his facial expressions as the piece progressed it was once again amazing... the imagery incredible and outstanding!!!! Nightmares do come true, and you make them come alive... although to me this was very pleasant!!!
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this sent shivers up my spine and had me looking around! Masterfully written.
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to feel the grips of pain
sliced through the heart
tears the essence wrapped wire
rusted in soul...this is the start
and the place nightmares began
with the twisted sight of metal
and the details lie within
Hugs love♥
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