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Butterbee


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Not a Butterfly or a bee
I'm odd can't you see
Instead of a buzz,or flutter
The sound you hear is more of a clutter

I can make others smile
At my wings they do beguile
To watch peoples face's glow
Like the colors in a bright rainbow

One of a kind, I am
And you can bet this is no scam
Soaring through the air against the sea
I am an erractic butterbee


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I have entered this in several contests but didn't win anything..
I think it should at least win HM..
C'mon think about it . It's "One of a kind"

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  • rrw gold member
    November 21
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    Hee! You know, it is. And it's nice to see a change once in awhile. I love how you took the time to design a specific look to the poem... and I do appreciate the bubbly "bee" movement of the piece. Carefree, childlike. Warmly funny and with the sweet energy of living.


  • peridotPixi
    August 21

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    cool

    the picture is cool and i like how you have used "butterbee"
    im not sure if that is the title of picture or not, you did a great job rhyming and that you described this creature well, that its not a butterfly or a bee,
    as always keep up the writing, ~Amy


  • prankstar
    August 21

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    hmmm very interesting. I like it. Very cheerful. I like the picture to. Great poem. Good job.

    ----prankstar


  • TheVampireLestat
    August 21

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    It's a little difficult for me to be critical when a poem is so upbeat and cheery, because I'm so accustomed to darker writes. This is cute, and poignant, and strangely uplifting because it is different from what I'm used to. I enjoyed reading it. It is very well written, but may I make one suggestion? The line "I make others smile" for some reason seems to upset the flow somehow. Perhaps I need to reread it. It might be the number of syllables in the line compared to those in many of the others. Either way, a lovely little piece.


  • FloridaBeachGirl
    August 21
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    Good poem

    Very good...I enjoyed reading


  • Account Closed198
    August 21

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    A quaint poem to be sure, this gave me a bit of a smile to read. As for form and such, there is nothing of note I can see, so I'm afraid this will be a bit short, well done though.


  • Crystal Tears
    August 21

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    Haha. That's cute. I like it


  • glenn shannon silver member
    August 21

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    you so are all that a butter bee and a flybutter and a bumblefly lol fun write so cute

  • sotanosister
    August 21

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    I like your poem! Whether you are a mythical creature or not, it's certainly fun to play dress up with words; you do it so well. What inspired you?

  • SpinnerAndTheHawk
    August 21

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    Cute, whimsical, amusing,
    A very enjoyable! poem

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    August 21

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    Okay, now I have heard of a butterbee before but it required a recipe of sorts... lol( will include the recipe at the end of the review just in case you need it... lol)

    Never heard of an insect called a butterbee and not sure what to make of this rather you are trying to tell us that one actually exist or you are just calling yourself one. As far as the poem goes, I think it is adorable and I love the imagery within it. Cool pic as well... but still not sure rather or not there is such an insect that is clasified as not a bee and not a butterfly, thus called a butterbee, am thinking that is just a close up picture of a bee who happens to be called perhaps a butter bee because of it's color, but all bees have wings and not all bees have stingers. Well whatever the case you certainly wrote a thought provoking piece and that is what is important dear. I love it!

    Hugs,

    Suzi

    P.S. - Here is the recipe I promised... lol

    Butterbee shot recipe:

    1/2 shot of butterscotch schnapps
    1/2 shot of Bailey's Irish cream

    fill the shot glass half way with butterscotch shnapps then slowly pour in your Bailey's making sure to stay in center of the shot ... enjoy!

  • twodie4
    August 21

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    I couldn't view the pic but your description sounds so magical and mystical. A lovely read that stays with your reader. Sorry I clicked twice, lost my connection first time round. Emma


  • StarEyes
    August 21

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    Mandi,

    This certainly left me smiling! What a beautiful read this one is! I love it! But to me, I think of you as a beautiful Monarch Butterfly...... so gentle, and caring, loving and kind... just to name a few.

    Great job!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • SabaSophiya
    August 21

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    A very cute piece of work! Made me smile

    Thanks for sharing!
    Way to go......


  • AndreaChanel
    August 21

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    wow....i've never heard of a butterbee once before. this was a rather charming and delightful read. flowed with an imaginative rhyme and rhythm..and thanks for the picture, a pleasurable discovery!

  • firefly star
    August 21

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    unfortunately i can't see the picture, but the discription in this poem is really good. i'm actually quite glad it wasn't a butterfly because they symbolise new beginnings and they seam to keep springing up in my life at the moment, it's quite freaky haha. good work on the poem and thanks for sharing.


  • Badass Brea
    August 21

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    I liked this piece! I didn't scroll down all the way when I started to read it, so I was smiling at the description & thinking to myself, that'd be fun to see! Then sure as shit I scroll down & there really is a such thing as a butter bee! I do love the wings, but the tail-like bottom/back is wicked nifty lookin' too!


  • TwiztidMaggot
    August 21

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    This is a really cool poem. I like how you wrote it! Keep up your amazing work!!! I love the pictures you have here.

    TwiztidMaggot


  • Mellindrae
    August 21

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    It's cute reminds me of an uncle of mine..he never called a butterfly a butterfly, instead he always said it was a 'flutterby' because it "fluttered by you"


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    August 21

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    Pretty like a butterfly, STING LIKE A BEE. I usually see this as a mask and think that people that like entertaining others are lonely or sad or broken and use that as a kind of ointment to ease the pain. I did like this poem allot and I'm glad that you placed it in the featured box. Well done!

    PS. The wings looks like glass to me

    Take care
    Becks


  • Rick Weston silver member
    August 21

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    nice clever lines and rhyme. a joy to read. a bee without the sting or a butterfly producing honey? good poem.


  • Uniquely-Scarred
    August 21

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    really good, a fun piece i enjoyed the read, take care


  • JackJumper silver member
    August 21

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    pleasent. made me feel like a hippy on a summers day laying in the field


  • Melee Vau gold member
    August 21
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    enjoyed your poem, thanks


  • Swangrnv gold member
    August 21

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    wow

    this is very nice my friend, a cute lil rhyme and interesting story.. here i'm wondering if there really is such a creature..when low and behold you post a picture of what looks for all the world like a BUTTERBEE! very good stuff for sure!

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