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Daddy, I love you...

Please explain to me dad
I just don't understand
I thought things were fine
You promised you wouldn't leave
Yet again it was a lie
Please
Will you please
Tell me the truth
What am I doing wrong
That makes it so
I can't be your number one
I try so hard dad
You just can't see it
You're my world dad
Like drugs are yours
I only want to ask
One more thing from you
When you tell me you love me
Can it be the truth?

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  • Wolfiegoddess
    August 21

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    The poem is good but the wording is kind of awkard at times. Line 6 to 11 is the awkard section. I would revise that section. Otherwise great job. -two thumbs up