in the shadows...
sits a kevlar
a sniper riffle
and a vest
a ranger
bows his head
thinking about
his gurl back home
wondering about
all the tests
she been having
done lately
he whispers
"why wont
she tell me
what wrong?"
he grabs his gear
and walks out the door
in the shadows...
a bomb lays in wait
waiting for someone
to come and step on it
a group of rangers
can be seen
in the distance
coming this way
very slowly
the bomb
antisipates them
BOOOOOOOMMMMMM!!!!
a soldier goes flying
through the air
utter darkness...
he can hear
men screaming
"man down!"
"man down!"
but he cant see them
suddenly the pain
engulfs his sences
the last thing he hears
"i got you bro
stay with me!
MEDIC!"
in the shadows...
a young women
sits in the hospital
waiting for the doctor
finaly the nurse
calls her name
she patiently waits
in the doctors office
soon the doctor
comes in and sits down
"well we got the results
and they were negative
the legion
is precancerous
we will watch
you very closely
for the next
year and a half"
in the shadows...
a young man
sits beside a soldier
the man on the bed
has his head
wrapped tightly
slowly he begins
to move around
"hello....? anyone there?"
"im here bro"
"lil bro?"
"yeah"
"what happened?"
"a bomb"
"shes going
to kill me
when i get home"
"nah she wont bro
she loves yah"
"i know...
do you know
whats up
with my vision?"
a doctor walked by
and over heard
"you have bandages
wraped around
your eyes bro"
the doc spoke
"you have some
mild damage
to both eyes
you were lucky
soldier"
"what type
of damage?
will i be able
to see again?"
"your left eye
has minor
retnal detachment
you will eventually
need surgery to fix it
and your right eye
just has some
corneal abrasions
that will take
some time to heal
on their own but
eventualy yes
you will be able
to see again soldier."
in the shadows...
a young man
guides another
across post
towards the phones
"here's my phone book
she is listed as
SUGARCAKES"
"bro...your whiped"
"shut up!
dial the number
all ready!"
"fine"
the young man
hands over the phone
as it starts to ring
"hello"
"hey sugarcakes"
"oh my goodness!!!
are you ok?
"im alright really.
its healing,
the doc says
my eyes will be
a.o.k before i leave."
"you sure"
"im sure"
"i love you"
"i love you too.
i cant wait
to come home"
"i miss you so much
you better stay safe"
"what did the doc
tell you?"
"im fine..
il be watched
very closely
for a time.
as long as it
stays the way it is
i will stay fine"
"i wish you
would tell me
what all the tests
have been for"
"i will tell you
when your home safe"
Author notes
this is about me and my man right now...il add more as the story grows...
A contest entry
- Rhyme,Lyrics, Prose, Dirty Pretty. by Antebellum.
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• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - life.....how miserable by Violent Glass.
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Comments
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great write


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wow, this is incrdible. great write, i love it! now i have to read the whole story
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thanks for sharing with me!

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in the shadows...
a bomb lays in wait
waiting for someone
to come and step on it
a group of rangers
can be seen
in the distance
coming this way
What a build up. This is wonderfully written.
I hate knowing this stuff really happens,
but you have written it in a way many people who have families fighting for our freedom can relate to.
thanks for entering. -
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i write it sort of how it happened...its sort of true..and sort of made up cause i dont know exactly what happened to him cause the story i get until he comes home in october is "i fell down and bumped my head" after october i might add some too it to make it happier...
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