Broken headstone found
In the forest
Overturned
Carefully brushed
Could only read
"But not forgotten..."
A contest entry
- endless by Connor Blackbird.
700 points, ended August 21, 21 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Beautiful, and you halved the contest requirement - what that tells me is that you know how to take care in selecting a word. Somehow in spite of the remarkable brevity of this piece, it felt as long or longer than any of the others. When I read poems like this, what's left out can say as much as what's included... you leave out every possible instance of a personal pronoun, and that strikes me as rather significant itself; the object discovered more important than its discoverer. The end line is subtle and understated. Last and certainly not least, you took an incredibly powerful approach to the prompt. This is the kind of thing I was hoping to get in starting this contest. Thank you very much for your entry.
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Thank you very much; it was a pleasure. I changed woods to forest, to add an alliteration. Thought of that today...
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