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Farewell

How can I say goodbye?
These images have provided joy in lonely moments.
Though they hurt more than help, they are precious still.
Pictures of you present themselves like a silent film.
Words, non-existent, but its purpose is served.

Never do I tire of reliving flashbacks.

It was almost like yesterday.

I can still feel you.

Fingerprints from gentle caresses,

Lie invisibly imprinted underneath my skin, in my heart

The sweetness of past kisses though faint remain on these lips.

In rare moments when defenses are down,

And my heart unguarded, vulnerable, I hear you.

My knees fail to support the weight of my heartache,

I endure from those barely there whispers of your voice.

Not entirely sure I can bear this bitter-sweetness any longer.

 

Oh, how I love to reminisce,

But it's time I bid thee farewell.

 

For my sake...

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  • SpydurPoet gold member
    October 17

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    powerful emotions in this. you did a stunning job. i know this feeling, too. captivating poem.
    thanks for entering the contest and best of luck!
    write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


  • Kathraina silver member
    October 16

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    I love that last line, it really pulls the whole piece together. Very good job with this write!



    bravo and thank you for entering




    ♥ kate


  • PaintedParisPassion
    September 14

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    Fingerprints from gentle caresses,

    Lie invisibly imprinted underneath my skin, in my heart

    The sweetness of past kisses though faint remain on these lips.

    In rare moments when defenses are down,

    And my heart unguarded, vulnerable, I hear you.

    My knees fail to support the weight of my heartache,

    I endure from those barely there whispers of your voice.

    Not entirely sure I can bear this bitter-sweetness any longer.



    Oh, how I love to reminisce,

    But it's time I bid thee farewell.

    Sometimes its hard to say goodbye, even though we know its truly whats best for us. This was a great ending and the poem in all was very enjoyable. I loved the ending because it had an almost shakespeare feel to it. Thanks for entering and good luck!


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    September 11
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    You have to know when to say goodbye, you have to be strong enough, very well done.

    ♥
    whisper


  • Suffer-in-silence
    September 10
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    i love it
    such raw emotion
    but sooooo beautiful
    again i love it <3
    you are very talented
    thanks for entering
    -Rose


  • Nomadic Prince
    September 8

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    Passionate

    As others have said, a sad write you've lost a kindred spirit--but still a form of advance in your own personal life and so I would say a rather joyous write. Life is full of its own comings and goings and what we can do is to bring joy to the people who are passing through our lives. This write speaks volumes for what it really means to miss someone dear, weather a romantic interest (as it is meant) or a dear friend meant for eternity. This is wonderful.


  • pumpykin
    September 6
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    Such a sad write, I can really feel the emotion. Very beautiful Thank you for entering


  • Blue-Rose Beauty
    September 4

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    Pictures of you present themselves like a silent film.
    Words, non-existent, but its purpose is served.

    Never do I tire of reliving flashbacks.

    Wow.. I love those lines, especially the first one, it is beautiful and descriptive.

    I'd like to copy and paste every line and say what I liked about them, this is such a great write.

    The ending was sad, but then you covered it end by saying that it was for your own sake though you were still hurt.

    Thanks for entering. Great write.


  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    September 2

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    This is an awesome write. So many emotions present themselves in this poem. I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest.

  • izzy1804
    September 1
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    Great poem....Good luck.


  • Hija of the King
    August 31
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    Great poem. Thanx for entering. Good luck. God bless.


  • foreveryourslove
    August 30
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    awwww.....


  • Wyakin
    August 30

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    Beautiful. I related this poem in more ways that I wanted to. But it also shows how Real your poem is. I thought this was a wonderful piece. Good luck!
    Wyakin


  • Little Lesley
    August 28
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    It's hard to say goodbye sometimes. AWW.
    Good luck!
    ♥~Little Lesley~♥

  • nadine.
    August 27

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    "Fingerprints from gentle caresses,
    Lie invisibly imprinted underneath my skin, in my heart"
    wow. great write.


  • Ami
    August 27

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    Wow great write I liked the ending a lot
    Congrats on the bronze trophy that you won so far for this
    Thank you so much for entering my contest and Good luck
    -♥Amy♥

  • Xxpoison.kissesxX silver member
    August 25
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    this is quite the write... excellent. Thank you for entering:]

  • hendiadys
    August 24

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    A Bit Conventional.

    L5 could do with some adjustment, to show what "its" refers to. L11 "remain" should be "remains" (verb subject is "sweetness"). L17 insert "would" before "love"? But 17 and 18 are at a lower level than the preceding part of the poem. "Bid thee" is clichéd, and probably would be better as "bade you". "Thee" is faux-archaic, unless you can find a way to show it's affectionate. Saved by the last three words.

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    August 23

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    my dear, you are on a roll lately
    I don't know what or who has inspired you but you just keep improving
    every new write seems to be better than the one before it
    I don't know where you shopped for that muse of yours, but
    I suggest you ensure you keep up your muse payments so that
    they never come reposess it because that muse is working overtime for
    you dear.

    I wish you the best of luck in the contest hun


  • BluesMan gold member
    August 23

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    I became so emersaed in this write because my grief over the death of my soul mate March 10th of this year is still haunting me. This poem for me is bittersweet.

     

    These last two lines, sums it up for me. 

     

    But it's time I bid thee farewell.

    For my sake...

     

    Good luck in the contest

     

    Bill


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    August 23

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    I love the imagery and emotion in this.
    Wonderful work as always my friend and I am sure that you
    will do well in this contest. It's always a pleasure to read you!
    Good luck to you!




    Jeremy0826


  • Hrob329
    August 23

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    "Pictures of you present themselves like a silent film.
    Words, non-existent, but its purpose is served."
    This line is beautiful! Wonderful all the way around!

  • C Caulingwoods
    August 23
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    Wonderful


  • Sumthinlifeish
    August 23

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    YEP...its me.

    Thats pretty much what i've been feeling. I'm workin on one about it now. I'll let you know when I finish it.


  • Black Narcissus gold member
    August 23
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    Very sad, moving.

    I think you have one small typo ~ vocie


  • islekine gold member
    August 23

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    Great entry!

    Love the line...
    Pictures of you present themselves like a silent film.
    Best wishes in the contest and always!
    Write on!

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