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Fragility

 

 

 

 

was their love
as fragile as the frame
that held the photograph
of their wedding

 

 

 

 

a porcelain picture
easily shattered?

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

20 words

prompt: porcelain pictures.

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  • sinfull
    September 29

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    Yes, the age of the disposable marriage/relationship. Your poem would be great as a synopsis for a modern novel. =) I see the porcelain fractured..
    Congrats on the silver, deserves!


  • Bluemonday silver member
    September 17

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    a quickie competition as quick as some marriages and as quick as some divorces...so sad that life does that to us...

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      September 17
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      Many thanks Dan ... for some it is definitely a way of life

      Sue
      x


  • capricornpoet
    August 24

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    fragile

    It is so , love is elusive , it is a bird of a season , then gone ,


  • Amera gold member
    August 24

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    This is beautifully penned and so sad. I see why it won a trophy. Great work!

    Love,
    Amera

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      August 24
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      Thank you Amera, it's amazing what you can do with 20 words

      Love
      Sue


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    August 22

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    Very well said. I enjoyed this. It is perfect. Congratulations on the silver cup. It is very much deserved.

    Mike


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      August 23
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      Many thanks Mike for the comment and congratulations, I'm glad you liked this.

      Sue
      x


  • HereComesTheSun
    August 21

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    i really liked this
    you gave questions
    and this piece is a great teaser for a longer poem
    thanks for entering


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      August 23
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      Thank you for the silver in your contest and I'm glad you liked what I did with the prompt.

      Sue


  • awannabepoet
    August 21

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    Marriage and weddings are no longer a marker for life and the long term.


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      August 21
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      Many thanks for your comment, it's a sad fact of life that marriage is so short lived by many and I wanted this to reflect that.

      Sue
      x


  • arafura gold member
    August 20
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    Lovely. 20 great words.

  • Topnotchsy
    August 20

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    Wow, this goes straight to the heart. We've all seen wedding pictures (and been to weddings) of people who no longer share their lives, and at times we look back and wonder, if only...


  • xXxAkiraxXx
    August 20

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    Oh my, This is very good. Very short yet so much told.
    I love it.


  • Legend silver member
    August 20

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    A piece that tells so much with only 20 words The sign of a true artist
    Excellent

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