staring straight at the sun
without rest,
thinking of deep
things:
nothing is beautiful,
everything--
aimless, without cause.
he died on a tuesday
praying the rosary, in a church pew.
there is no meaning in that.
there is no beauty.
it is as random
as the sun is bright.
In a list
A contest entry
- PW Quickie 4 by crivanea.
400 points, ended August 27, 32 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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it's interesting that you equate death with randomness.
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I'm so glad that I took a chance and clicked on this...
This is a wonderful write !
Excellent imagery , leaves your readers really thinking...
Many blessings
~A~
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hmmm you know this made me think of some mad man coming into a church full of people... he has this gun you see and lets loose on the people there...
Yes, that definitely would be without purpose... these people died. Just because this person was mad! They died.
That was what I was thinking of when I read this.
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This is really good, nice work.
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beautiful, few words say everything that needs to be said....
Well written, well thought out, well done.
Thank yoou for the amazing read.
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I am waiting for that day when my free verse comes out this magnificently. You are so very good!
We never know where death will find us, a church pew of all places, would be perfect for those who might be praying for death to find them.
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Wow, this is like something I want to accomplish, a great poem. This is short and sweet. Its fantastic, ful of emotion, which is always good.
Fantastic write, its amazing
Liz
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::sigh:: ....you render me speachless, which is saying something.
My favorite lines would have to be:
nothing is beautiful,
everything--
aimless, without cause.
and
there is no meaning in that.
there is no beauty.
it is as random
as the sun is bright.
you have this amazing ability to take the simplest things and shine a new light on them making them into these wonderful, tragic, heartwrenching Events. Everything in life is more than it seems, and more than one expects it too be, and you see that, and make beautiful, breathtaking poetry out of it.
i wish i could keep you in my pocket.
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you're amaaaazing
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Well written
rather a sad poem, although nothing looks beautiful when you're staring straight at the sun and everything in life has a cause and an effect although I agree it is difficult to see a reason for everything that happens and easier to write it off
as random( or accidental) like Darwin did, but I digress it is an interesting poem
allbeit a little contraversal then most good poems are.Best Wishes ...George
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this is fantastic. short but with the kind of irony that makes me laugh grimly at my computer screen, and with the kind of cleverness that makes my right leg bounce up and down excitedly (it is, right now!). bookmarked!
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Seems so simple
The rarity of an event, like any object, invests a novelty value only. It is appropriate that your poem is short, but that it gives a line's worth to remind one of a thing more commonly wonderful, amongst other things
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Very simple, but yet still very deep. I liked it for that. And you got me thinking about death....and how....if everything happens for a reason....then why even bother trying in life? I can't believe in destiny, simply because, if all my effort looking for love and success are for naught....why even bother waking up >.<
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This is simple, deep and gorgeous, Matt. Congrats and kudos.
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I like this. It's intelligent and nicely written.
Worthwhile read.
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outstanding wording,
excellent flow,
deeply emotional tale being told.
love the title.
all in all very nicely done.
loveandblessings2u & yours always
joyce
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Finding purose and you touched base from your write, Deserving of the bronze and so much more. Excellent. Blessings. This is deep.
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OHHHHH WOW!
Love this Matt. Definitely one of your best - and that's saying a lot. Deserved MUCH MORE than bronze, in my opinion. Should have been Gold. Why isn't there a platinum trophy on this site? Should have been platinum.
"there is no meaning in that.
there is no beauty.
it is as random
as the sun is bright."
Amazing.
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i need writing lessons - and YOU must be my teacher! haha. this was WOW!
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.......speechless! I love the front ..that struck me the most..the title match the poem well too..and then i started reading..and even though your words are so simple..there is such honesty..such depth in it...a beautiful write poet...wonderfully done..spoken with a voice that have seen too much
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This is a great write with a lot of emotion. Beautiful. Very beautiful.
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I like t his poem quite a bit! Without Purpose -- it feels random--as it says.
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i like this piece
"nothing is beautiful" - sounds so definitive and lonely
and oddly beautiful at the same time, if that makes sense.
muy bien.
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I've read over several of your poems just now, and for some reason, this one strikes home. Not because it's personal. I'm not religious and certainly never knew anyone who died in a church pew, ahem. But because it moves like natural thought. I love how you talk about thinking aimless things, and then jump right into one of those things by mentioning the man who died. Wonderful poetic effect.
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This is deep. A very intriguing write and I loved reading it. It really made me think about purpose and if there is really any, anywhere. You're still as excellent a writer as you were when I first started reading you & I believe you get better with every write. Great write!
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I like how you alternate the lengths of your lines. It seems to add to your theme. Your use of lowercase lettering throughout your poem also adds to your theme.
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this is really good, i enjoyed the read, take care
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a fantastic in depth piece... beautifully worded and really makes you think. love it,
hugs,
georgie,
xxx
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great writing....
and makes ya wonder
what was his final prayers?
his reasoning for needing to utter every prayer on the rosary?
because it seemed he wanted to personally deliver them.
ears/Seattle
way to write!
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This is great... as usual!! I'm running out of things to say to you because everything I read, I like.
So instead, I am going to comment on your female fan base... you've got quite a following there... HAHAHAHAHAHA!!!
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lol
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Rich! :D
I really love your choice of words. they flow
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I love those last 2 lines.
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Great poem. It shows the loss and emotions of the confusion. It really deserved that honorable mention. The death of a person can be far-reaching and confusing.
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Makes me see a man trying to find purpose, inside a church for a faith long since burnt out and yet he dies spiritless and unseen. Your short ones say a lot without the need for more words, almost personal here and so very afraid C
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This is depressing. This poem speaks to me of someone just giving up. Life has come to a stop when this persona realized there was nothing beautiful about it that wasn't random.
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"there is no meaning in that.
there is no beauty.
it is as random
as the sun is bright." <---love this line
awesome piece and perfect for the prompt..good luck to you
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Wow, this piece has caught me off gaurd.
There is something within your words which draws me to it.
Bravo and thank you for entering
♥ Kate
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"he died on a tuesday
praying the rosary, in a church pew." -- seriously, I loved that. You rock.
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you cut through the useless randomness and spill guts that cynicism has created in this. the truth of it is like a dagger, like each one of those beads choking us off. yet there is beauty in each of us, a breath that may be shallow and a fragrance so subtle that no one notices, but it is still there... just depends on the angle we view it. like the sun, whose random rays strike when they want, hiding behind clouded views, or shining on a day when we feel well rested, beauty can be found in the smallest of things or the most unusual moments.
this was like drinking an energy drink. it made me excited to be alive, yet jittery because purpose is what keeps that life living.
very well done. your writing is always very poignant.
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''it is as random
as the sun is bright.''
^ great ending matt! i really love this. it really makes you think! awesome work. this is definitely gold, for sure!
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an amazing poem matt. really effective and moving . contemplative and challenging x
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sometimes it does feel like that. you caught that mood perfectly.
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Perfect...
and you're right, seems meaningless sometimes. Sad truth here matt.
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Whoa.
This poem speaks for itself. Its perfect!
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