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Chaos

Grabbed the stars from the sky while they were still hot,
In a tight fist scalding,
threw them to the earth.

Rain of fire, candlelight,
..... a spell from the Dark Ages,
illuminate their minds,
smash this fucker to pieces.

Sabotaged the silent night,
and rocked the boats like paper plates.
Cascading them in a whirl of molten lake.

The thrill of summoning Chaos for chaos' sake.

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  • Xxpoison.kissesxX silver member
    August 23

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    Excellent pen!

    "Sabotaged the silent night,
    and rocked the boats like paper plates.
    Cascading them in a whirl of molten lake."

    I fucken love that part! ^^


  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    August 21

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    Welcome to Allpoetry

    I love this poem. Your imagery is fantastic, and though this is short, you still manage to make an impact on your audience. I'm not a fan of profanity in poetry, since most people just curse for cursing's sake, and a poorly-placed f-bomb can make or break an entire piece. You, however, are the first poet I've encountered, in a long time, who can curse artfully, and that is something to be admired.

    My only criticism: I don't like your title, as I don't find it befitting to the poem itself. The wrapping-paper should always be indicative of what's inside, and I don't feel that yours did the poem enough justice. Of course, that's my opinion... Take it for what it's worth.

    Well done, and keep writing!

    Laura
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  • R Sonny
    August 21
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    nice, i like chaos for chaos' sake, it reminds of the feeling of being in love