Land,
cultivated by enslaved man.
Honest hands toiled and sowed.
An empire was built upon blood, sweat.
Greedy men ruined it all,
Mocking past sufferers.
Author notes
Prompt: "All civilizations throughout history, have been built on the backs of the poor. Various levels of exploitation have been employed, from subtle domination, to out-and-out slavery." - Mark Griffin
25 words
My best attempt
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short and to the point nicely done with that prompt. thank you for entering and good luck int he contest i hope to see you in the next round
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well written. it was short but right to the point. succinct, yes? I like the brevity of each line on its own, for example, "blood, sweat." you don't use "blood and sweat" and that makes this piece a unique style for me to read. i feel like you captured the prompt well but you didn't really expand upon it or bring it more to life than what it already was. nonetheless it definitely conveys a strong message and I can't deny that that is an important aspect to any poem. Great job and congrats onthe bronze!
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This reminded me of Rome. When I read it. Your poem was short but it showed the message though. I hope you do well in my contest and thanks for your entry. I appreciate it
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-Jess
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forgot the clappy things!!
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unique take on that prompt. and you said so much with so few words in this poem...the last line is a perfect way to end the piece. it makes the reader want to go back and read the whole thing again.
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oh yes..i read this and i think of rome...and all those great civilization..the empires that rise and fall...nicely penned poet...short poem that express so much
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So true... Loved the write, true hard facts....
's to you sis
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i like this poem, excellent job with the prompt!!!
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That's how it is. Bravo.
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Typical you with wonderzeful poetry!
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And a beautiful attempt
I love the rawness of this.
Good luck, miss!
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