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Fugue pts. 2 & 3

Like dusty rugs and banana slugs
leave residue on my floor
my newfound spirituality
left an imprint like a sore

Pock-marked children with menial ambitions
played on cobble streets
humming songs with lustrous percision
to a fog horns beat

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  • DogFish silver member
    October 24
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    Bach never wrote 'em like that!


  • Jayns Destroyed
    September 11
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    man. you are fucking fantastic kyle.


  • MadisonRae
    August 30

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    You got the beat, bruhtha

    never heard your pieces rhyme before. it's nice.

    a lot of disease...its the only connection between the two fugues besides the rhyme.

    i imagine trash can percussion, hopscotch, and whooping cough.

    very nice.