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Making Believable What is Imaginable



i
Listening
or mysteriously spy-licious
casting wishes to stars in hiding
heaven, as you envision

ii
Near and Far
beyond each door a surprise
brilliant, bursting full
amongst the gardens





iii
Angelic Vagabond
to inspire, to motivate, to teach
conception of the mind
distance to ponder

iv
Weird Sagacity
making believable what is imaginable
to enter upon or merely surmise
surreptitously listening


Author notes

Familiar?
"Scrambled lines" per directives.

Graphics by Aesthete2000

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  • Rick Weston silver member
    September 20

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    so i guess good lines are good lines in any context, and you certainly have several to share and scramble.

    congrats on the silver.


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 21
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      I found it so interesting, reading the other entries,
      how each piece was a synopsis of the author
      and did flow imaginatively. Paloszoo gave
      speicific numbered directions for the
      piece and the particular lines, with
      just a liitle element of choice
      in some of the lines, where
      one could select from
      several options. But
      most were zeroed
      in and we had to
      stick to them!!!
      Very revealing.
      Thanks, Rick.
      M-C


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    August 28

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    excellent

    Congrats on the Silver Trophy sis
    Loved the poem
    I entered this one too but mine was way off LOL
    Do come by....I have up a few new ones you haven't read
    Hugs
    Your sis
    Susan~~~


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 29
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      Those "natural cures" threw a real twist in yours!!!

      Thank you, Susan,
      on my way...

      M-C


  • Yemassee gold member
    August 28
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    So I guess this means your poems when dissected and the pieces are sewed back together make more sense than the rest of ours when doing the same.

    Silver is nice. I still need to get Ima the three basic trophy groups. He's lacking in gold, silver and bronze. He's looking rather gaunt.

    Congratulations on the silver. Notice I typed out the whole world while Pix just typed out "congrats" that means I'm better than her, lol


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 28
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      Tsk, tsk! competitive always with the winged one!

      You were born for contests!

      Surely Ima would like an environmental "green " contest,
      or one where his vast reading experience could come to play!!

      If you hadn't thrown them all away you would have a closetful!

      Still wish you would have tried it--a mix of horror, fun and sentiment!
      But then you take yours out of chronological order, don't you, when
      you move them around?


      • Yemassee gold member
        August 28
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        Competitive? No, not at all. Just being silly. As far as Ima, I just want one color of each. I didn't try that contest because it seemed too hard and chaotic. I don't do well wiith chaos that wasn't created by me. When I decided I might enter, it was just too darn hot to do anything that required real thinking.


        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          August 28

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          A/C cools brains as well as bods.
          Oh, you would be even more prolific.
          And that's a good thing!


          • Yemassee gold member
            August 28

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            My days of proliferation are behind me. The stockpile has been dwindling. Me and Ima have a non-proliferation pact. We have also agreed to destroy the bulk of our poetic warheads.


            • Aesthete2000 gold member
              August 28
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              Now that is clever! but pacts can be broken!1
              One swath with the cane!!

              Take care today!


  • pixiestix gold member
    August 27

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    Congrats on the shiny silver.


  • Paloszoo gold member
    August 27

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    i
    Listening
    or mysteriously spy-licious
    casting wishes to stars in hiding
    heaven, as you envision

    ii
    Near and Far
    beyond each door a surprise
    brilliant, bursting full
    amongst the gardens


    Wow. Did you cheat? This is outstanding! Thanks for entering. I really enjoyed your work! Good luck in the contest!


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 28
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      No, no cheating!
      I was careful to count down to find the right line.
      Thought I was thrown by "spy-licious"--a coined word
      that invited readers to solve the mystery of how
      our dear angelica had become a "Fallen Angel."

      I had been on a jaunt with angels, perspective
      and container gardens---and of course it showed.

      Your efforts to set up the contest netted amazing reasults,
      as the pieces did have a coherance and a cohesion,
      the assemblng of the lines actually creating
      a portrait of sorts of each writer---an intro to read more!!

      Thank you for your creativity and patience in developing the contest--
      and for the silver, too!!

      M-C


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    August 20
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    Here is a link to another of Paloszoo's contests.
    A zillion musical prompts!
    http://allpoetry.com/contest/2457657


  • Yemassee gold member
    August 20
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    I wonder how many people will actually be honest and follow the rules, especially since...THIS PART DELETED TO PROTECT ME. No, if it were me I would cheat and alter my poems to make a perfect sounding poem, lol. I can admit it since I won't be entering.

    Well, the tone is familiar, if not any specific lines. Did you actually use spy-licious in a poem?

    I have to go see what Pix did. I bet hers is a mess, she wouldn't cheat like I would!


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 20
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      Actually, it only took a little over half an hour to find all the pieces and the lines.
      If you read the directives you will notice there are several lines where
      one is given a choice, so that allows some coherence.(Took as much or more
      time in bucket finding the right sized version of my drawings to use!)

      You would not have to cheat!!! the selected lines would reveal your broad
      range of topics and the intellect spurring the words.

      In "Fallen Angel," the play on words about Angelica---there it was,
      a coined word! I did wish I could cheat on that , but didn't. One could
      set it up better by just writing another new poem to push the numbering
      to a piece with a better line.

      It's numbers! You like numbers!

      Check out joy's---for after she read mine she went to work to create her own,
      but put us all to shame, for she listed her sources, line by line, with links!!!!
      I was seeing triple by then, so had not the energy to record all that!!
      (Bows to waydownuponjoy!)


    • pixiestix gold member
      August 20
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      Now that's a backhanded compliment if I ever heard one. It was the Pirate and Sock poems that were my downfall. lol


      • Aesthete2000 gold member
        August 20
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        Hey---still here?
        Yeah, it's the whacky ones that throw a curve---
        but actually, reveal the imaginative soul inside the lines!


        • pixiestix gold member
          August 20
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          I'll have to remember that one. lol I just thought writing them showed I'm whacky.


          • Aesthete2000 gold member
            August 20
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            The versatility, really!
            To fly from the moon
            to swim in the current,
            to confess to the sock
            mystery!

            That, too, is why Yem's would
            be so interesting---from
            "shocking tales of horror"
            to the classics to depth of
            feeling!!


            • pixiestix gold member
              August 20
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              Ah, he'd never do it.

              He's a self professed *Hans and Franz accent* "lazy mahn"

              • Aesthete2000 gold member
                August 20
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                Maybe we could dare him into it!


                • pixiestix gold member
                  August 21
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                  He'd try to weasel out of it with some cockamaymie excuse. lol I double dog dared him to do something once and he didn't do it. Alas, I'm afraid it will never happen.


                  • Aesthete2000 gold member
                    August 21
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                    Hmmmmm---he'd probably want us to do it for him--
                    no----that wouldn't be any fun for him. To do work
                    there must be fun involved!!

        • pixiestix gold member
          August 20
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          Still here. Got home not too long ago from NYC.

          Great exhibit...OMG!


          • Aesthete2000 gold member
            August 20
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            Oh---tell me more---I should have asked for a ....well, couldn't be
            a cellcert---a cellshare---firsthand account as you saw the items
            on display! When you mentioned taking a note pad I first thought
            of making sketches of some of the items, but, of course, you meant
            words!!!!!!
            Tell, tell!


            • pixiestix gold member
              August 20
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              I was under the impression there was going to be more of Lennon's art than there was. Mostly pen and ink drawings...doodles of a sort...some from the Bed In that he and Yoko hung on the hotel room walls.

              Lots of artifacts from many musical greats...guitars of course and clothing...Elvis Peacock jumpsuit, Johnny Cash's boots, Buddy Holly's shoes and suit just to name a few.

              What I enjoyed the most, were the handwritten notes, the lyrics composed, torn out notebook pages from Lennon, Springsteen, Simon and Garfunkel, Billy Joel, Michael Jackson just to name some.

              Museum experience was amazing. Headsets programmed so when you were viewing an artist's artifacts, their music was playing in your ears.


              • Aesthete2000 gold member
                August 20
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                Ah, the sound with the sight,
                a treat for the senses.

                The notebooks---so relateable,
                so personal, thinking of one's own
                past pages. And that's from where
                your "Meager Words" was born, right?

                That initial point of creation---a treasure
                to see. Goose bump moments!!

                Thanks for the "I-report," pix,
                as instant as CNN!!1!!


                • pixiestix gold member
                  August 20
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                  Goose bump and misty moments. So much more. We all want to go back again except not in August. lol Dreadfully hot today.

                  This is Pix E. Stix for AP news...back to you Aesthete. lol


                  • Aesthete2000 gold member
                    August 21
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                    There is quite a communication system
                    in place here---world wide news coverage.

                    And who's to say that some of those just created
                    identities are not of alien nature---thus,
                    inter-plasnetary communication!!!


                    • pixiestix gold member
                      August 21
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                      Don't tell me there are crop circles! I'm making new tinfoil hats just to be on the safe side. lol


                      • Aesthete2000 gold member
                        August 21
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                        Yikes---you may still be under the influence
                        of Yoko-John doodles, post Beatle hypnotic powers!


                        • pixiestix gold member
                          August 21
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                          I was hypnotized by Bruce's Yellow 57 Chevy convertible driving down Thunder Road.


                          • Aesthete2000 gold member
                            August 21
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                            Who wouldn't be?????

                            If the time line would have worked
                            I should have used the "57 yellow
                            in "Quest." instead of the "55,
                            but it would have thrown off
                            Moxie history.


                            • pixiestix gold member
                              August 21
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                              So much time and effort to keep it all historically correct, down to the smallest details. Quite an impressive saga.


                              • Aesthete2000 gold member
                                August 21
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                                How appropriate we are chatting about this in a piece called " Making
                                Believable What is Imaginable!"

                                Thanks, pix, I appreciate your
                                observations.


                              • Aesthete2000 gold member
                                August 21
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                                And they are still hanging in time---awaiting the crossover---hmmmm---need to start training program again---build the stamina to continue!!!!!
                                the yellow '55 chev is supposed to show up at a car show in 2009 Maine!


                                • pixiestix gold member
                                  August 21
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                                  Suspended animation or frozen like Walt Disney? lol

                                  When the time is right the creative spirit will start the program.

                                  They better have that car show soon before it starts snowing again. lol

                                  My 3000th comment is in here somewhere. lol *throws confetti*


  • Olivias Violin
    August 20

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    I was just showing my husband, this morning, a drawing you once made that I'd printed. A tulip with a pink face and green eyes


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 20
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      I remember---walk like a tulip--or something like that!!!

      Thinking about the glass flower garden!


  • pixiestix gold member
    August 20
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    Yours came together beautifully. I especially like the second verse envisioning the surprises found in the garden bursting with life.

    True of yours that it could be a brief intro to the poet and artist behind the words. I don't know if I feel the same of mine. lol


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 20
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      Just from the few I had read already of the other entries
      that seemed so evident--a cosmic book blurb!!1

      And stanza ii didn't have any choices, just played from the directives---

      Yours not coming together?


      Thanks, pix.

      • pixiestix gold member
        August 20
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        Mine is okay. I like the way yours worked much better.


        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          August 20
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          Luck plays a large part---of the right words landing
          on the right direction line!!!

          Your key words read winged one when linked together!!!
          The moonlight, the current!!!
          We need to get Yem and Ima to give it a try!


  • Denerica silver member
    August 20

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    Clever write once again, I love the title, and a way of explaining dreamscaping. Wonderful, enlightening. Blessings.


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 20
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      Hi, Denise.
      It was quite interesting reading some of the entries,
      for rather than being just a mix-up of lines,
      I found that each seemed to be a brief
      intro to each writer's works showing
      recuring themes, moods, et al.

      Thank you!

      M-C


  • Summer52
    August 20

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    Your imagination can create something believable...through your work of art.
    Very brilliant, Mumsy!

    Good luck !


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 20
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      Hi, summer!!!

      Had the art ready,
      followed the directions
      to put the lines together!
      Makes a litle sense---
      perhaps because I have
      recurring themes!!!
      Directions started with
      first line being title of first piece
      posted on AP---actually my first at
      SFF---haven't been to poems in ages--
      just go to the site to check up on Jack,
      Hoeftra here.

      Take care!

      Mumsy


  • waydownuponjoy
    August 20

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    How interesting ...

    this contest is and to see what continuity comes out of your production.
    Well shared poem that forces one to ponder between the lines and to see that thread of unspoken that speaks through it all! I liked how yours turned out and as always the drawings that enhance it. Thanks for posting. joy


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 20
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      The art was already created
      as were the words, just had
      to follow the directions and
      find the designated lines!
      The recent garden and angel
      pieces tended to pop up!

      Nice to see you, joy.

      M-C

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