The elegance of one so lovely and pure
As night transcends the sky above
You are my everything, and everything in faith
I pour into you, all of me, all I can endure.
You believeth in me like no other has before,
My life is nothing comparable to yours.
You are my beginning, my end, my first, and my last
My love, my purity, my one, and only.
You are the one true love of my life
And in death, I embrace, the future of us
Forever traversing the universal planes
Together, in otherworldly splendor.
You are the goddess of passion and love
You are the beauty that all aspires to
You are the fortress of honor, and pride,
You are the gems, the treasures, the glory of all.
How can I honor thee, how can I?
My feeble attempts can do nothing of honor.
But if I had control of the skies.
Ah, what glory I would rain upon thee.
The stars would bow, and shine their elegance upon thee.
The rain shall dance around thee like fireflies at night.
The moon shall shine upon thy face, casting it's bluish glow upon you
The Sun shall repent of ever having tried to take day away from thee.
The clouds shall part, and come down to meet you,
And take you up high to view the splendors up close
And I, for once, shall willingly call myself your equal.
I shall be with you always, from night, unto day, and from day till the end of time.
But none of these things I can give unto you
And I am sorry, I grieve with you.
But if you look into the sky, a shooting star, that is me as I wave
To my one, my only, from beyond the grave.
Author notes
A quick write as I try to get on track outside of the My Life for Yours Saga!
Working on my Freewrite.
In a list
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 13 of 13
-
It was ok.
Didn't really grab my attention.
-
that was beautifully writen..u have a way with words..and i can not evwn compare..but thank u so so much for sharing ur soul for all to see...keep writing..i look forward to reading more....
-
beautiful work here very nice indeed love is grand and you describe it very well
-
I Love A Bit Of Love.
I'm A Sucker For A Love Poem, And This Sure Is A Blooming Good One.
The Words Come Alive, And The Feelings Are So Obvious. Seriously, The Emotion In This Is Fantastic.
I Loved The Part ;
The stars would bow, and shine their elegance upon thee.
The rain shall dance around thee like fireflies at night.
The moon shall shine upon thy face, casting it's bluish glow upon you
The Sun shall repent of ever having tried to take day away from thee.
The clouds shall part, and come down to meet you,
Such Amazing Imagery Right Here.
Well Done On An Amazing Write.
Love
Bianca Adeva Melody.
Xxx
-
Cheers
Okay, here is your three cheers. And we you to write another just as good, if not better.
-
You've done it again
Reece, you've done it again. You've done it again. I go away for the summer, and my first day back, I see this, and, as usual, it is captivating. You are getting better and better it seems. Imagery was off the charts. Three cheers for this one. -
Well captured and thought provoking...
"And I, for once, shall willingly call myself your equal.
I shall be with you always, from night, unto day, and from day till the end of time."
I truly think these sentences said it all... One one honestly wouldn't willing admit someone is their equal because many of us have so much pride in ourselves. Your other half isn't a joke it truly means they are the completetion of your in yourself. Like yin and yang and in love and death.
The saddest part was "But none of these things I can give unto you
And I am sorry, I grieve with you."
Now you've become whole. I hope that you can share this with her whether here and now or later.
It's like that saying "do not stand before my grave and weep for I am not there, i do not die..."
Beautifully scripted. Keep on writing for you have lots to say, share, teach, and learn from yourself as well as others.
~Night
-
I loved the line, "that is me as I wave"- That was really creative and beautiful. Great use of imagery.
-
precious, i really get this
-
so deep. so meaningful. so sad. so soulful. so compassionate. so loving. so mournful. this comment is imposable to write because none of my thoughts are meaningful enough to express the greatness of your poem.
-
The depth of your soul
Is wonderful, sweet and compassionate. " But none of these I can give to you" saddened my heart. -
Very loving...and so well written. I hope you showed this to her
-
excellent
an appraisal of your loved one was never better written.you overflowed with these lines:
My life is nothing comparable to yours.
You are my beginning, my end, my first, and my last
My love, my purity, my one, and only.
You are the one true love of my life
she would get stuck to you emotionally forever.damn gud poem.Visit me and comemnt me as well
Adding your comment:
1 - 13 of 13
