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Apathetic Walrus

I liken myself to an apathetic walrus
Sitting motionless on a lonely chunk of ice
The wind blows on
The fish swim on
All of life passes me by
Yet here I remain an apathetic walrus
Sitting motionless on a lonely chunk of ice

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  • sinfull
    August 22

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    Excellent metaphor

    and good presentation. You present a concept with a metaphor that is far from cliche, kudos for that! Uncluttered by sentementality and straight up view. I like this, I think it is very well done!