chirp, chirp from my wall
a cricket sits inside it
toss and turn all night
A contest entry
- Haiku. by And Hyetal.
790 points, ended October 16, 57 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
please let me know what you think
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I think you have a wonderful image for haiku with the noise and the way it makes us react, and this is one i have experienced, so i know the truth of the thing...
...PK
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A splendid haiku indeed! Those little pest are sure annoying! You summed it up wonderfully.
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Nice write. There are worse sounds. Crickets are kind of comforting.
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It's great something so annoying could inspire you. I hate those darn things but you turned it into something beautiful. Well Done.
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Isn't
that annoying!
This is a great Ku & so visual, auditory & with a fine 'aha'!!! 
This looks like a winner to me. Here's a trophy from me to you. 
and an emoticon I just learned....
All the best in the contest.
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who tosses and turns? you, the cricket, or both?
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That darn cricket great write
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hm, i know that feeling. we own lizards who eat crickets..so we have alot of crickets. lol. great write. and good luck. take care
Stephanie ♥
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