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Lock and Key

I will never be there,
I will never feel safe,
With a lock and key,
To keep as my own.
And it will never be mine -
Just a thread running through this hour,
Slipping through the opaque.
Never here, never theirs, never yours.
Just me.
The night.
The clock.
Striking, striking, but it's late.
Too far gone, too far away.
And I knew it all along,
I felt it, and lost it.
I'm free.

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  • Sara Khan
    September 3
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    Wow..


  • cutepearl
    August 20
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    awww !! i fyl same


  • liftmeupletmefall
    August 20
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    Excellent piece. Lovely flow.


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    August 20

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    This is very cleverly thought off. I am very curious as to what would be the muse or inspiration behind this poem. Allot said and my mind now drifting. Thanks for sharing your poetry.

    Becks


  • No Quarter
    August 19

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    very well worded piece, and my favourite lines:
    "And it will never be mine -
    Just a thread running through this hour,
    Slipping through the opaque.
    Never here, never theirs, never yours."
    well done indeed.


  • aanika
    August 19

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    Just a thread running through this hour,
    Slipping through the opaque.
    Never here, never theirs, never yours.


    that was beautifully worded. your flow is amazing in this poem. i really enjoyed it.


  • Mellindrae
    August 19
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    it's cool. It's very unique, and definitely flows

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