Poetic Wine
Should poetry be viewed much like fine wine
That’s sniffed and swirled before you take a sip,
Should we make pause to analyse each line
And figure how we might have written it?
Should we make judgment on the form and style
Correcting errors as we go along,
Tut-tutting to ourselves and, all the while,
Deciding where such ‘rubbish’ should belong?
Should poetry be read by those who choose
To down a glass of beer with scarce a breath
Whose choice of language, rather like their booze
And how they think, is never hard to guess?
Should those with higher learning be inclined
To ditch the dregs and keep it well refined?
In a list
Does it fit the form? are scansion and stress okay?
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I try not to think too hard when writing a poem the best ones are those that took ten minutes to write...
the ones that get shredded are those I sat up all night labouring over
I leave the hard thinking to the reader
Loved your sonnet
'tis a merry tale
'twould go down very well
with a chilled Kentish ale!
Cheers!
John
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Dear Pattiboo,
Methinks, with poetry, one can't avoid
a certain analytical approach
for verse if it's, like wine, to be enjoyed,
the rules of rhyme and meter should not broach.
Your sonnet, from the first line till the end,
reads smoothly with a message that is fine.
No word or line should anyone offend
but touch the palate, like a vintage wine.
I cannot commend this sonnet more highly than by inviting you to include it in my Wyleian Sonnet Collection. If you will honour us by accepting my invitation, please add the following suffix to the title: - Wyleian Sonnet CCLIX and join the other sonneteers whose works grace the collection.
Please let me know if you accept.
Applause, love and hugs, XXX Hugh.
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this is a most fine and extremely well written sonnet! Just excellent in each and every regard...and I loved it, loved it!!
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Well done!
Pindar has something about being the cause of achievement in others, and how this wins, in itself, merit. Your sonnet has triggered another very good sonnet.
But as for your questions, surely poetry should be read by any and every one. And here I fall into the trap of which I have accused others, that of neglecting the poem as a poem and delving into its meaning. Technically, your ear is clearly well developed. "much like fine wine" ends a line with two spondees! And it's absolutely right!
When I first ventured into AP, I was aghast at the banality and lack of skill of so many posts. I may hace been looking at the outside of the oysters. There are more pearls than I thought. -
The ones with higher learnings should be ditched,they are too analytical, poetry should be written the way a poet wants,any other opinion is immaterial ( though it is nice to get conformation on the work carried out )
Well done
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Well, I was reading your lovely sonnet, and I just sort of started to write and this happened.
On Helicon: Upending Life
Well, I'm a guzzler: I slap my knees
Ecstatically and whoop for joy and shout
Whenever some magnificence pours out
Then slug it down: not sip by slow degrees.
I hold the paper bag between my knees
With purple mouth: a woozy knockabout,
I mumble and I shake and yell throughout
Then raise my wine and drain it to the leas!
Oh then in memory I savor all!
Reliving every slug and sip and taste:
A quaint nostalgic fool: that, if you please,
Has been inclined to stumble, slip, and fall
And luscious years in maddened passion waste
Upending life to drain it to the leas!
I hope you don't mind. How your poem inspired me!
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