some may say that love is fake,
the cause of many heart to ache,
and if you think this listen now,
for I will change your mind I vowe,
so take a seat and face this way,
and hear what i have come to say,
but if your mind does wonder here,
its best you up and disappear,
a mind un-free is hard to change,
and all I say will be in vain,
so either leave and part your seat,
or see the truth and be complete,
now we start this saddening tale,
somewhere on a rocky trail,
near a cliff is what they said,
where our lovers have just fled,
a boy and girl of teenage years,
have left their homes with many tears,
but all is now as it should be,
unless you choose to disagree,
and so they walk hand in hand,
along the cliff above the sand,
a smile and a kiss they share,
and yet they're totally un aware,
of what does wait so soon away,
as the skies turn to gray,
the lovers fearless on do walk,
and very soon begin to talk,
this and that they idle chat,
both pulling down on wooly hats,
for now is when the wind did strike,
almost with a great dislike,
the wind did catch him like a kite,
and very quickly out of site,
the girl did scream and run his way,
still with courage to display,
she grabbed his hand before he fell,
into the dark abyss of hell,
but still he hung there cold as snow,
was he dead she did not know,
she screamed and shouted down at him,
and from inside his life did brim,
he gripped on tight to her left arm,
but not so much to cause her harm,
so they both smiled as she started to lift,
but on this night their luck did shift,
and on a rock she slipped and slid,
as her lover hung off the cliff,
even though she did not fall,
she was un able to try and pull,
her body dragged to the edge,
and so he gave his final pledge,
to save her life he must let go,
and to the darkness far below,
she cried when she heard him say,
be he pleaded with her to obey,
and even though with much relent,
she gave her sad words of consent,
and so they said their last goodbyes,
and tears did then fill their eyes,
she wished for him another way,
but closer to the edge she strayed,
and as his love for her was strong,
he knew she was worth it all along,
so he knew what he must do,
and let her fingers now slip through,
he fell away into the depth,
as she lay there without breath,
so tell me now of what you feel,
and say to me loves un-real,
for when these lovers faced the end,
it was their love that made ammend,
and saved her life is what it did,
even if it could not save his.
Author notes
Random I know, but tell me what you think, took me ages to write
for my anastasia, I love you
This was though up while listening to "how to save a life" by the fray, Kindof depressing I know, but with my girlfriend away at the moment, I was sad and this poem came to be, I appreciate and all comments they mean a great deal to me, and I will take the time when I am able to replyto every one of them, as you have taken the time to write to me.
Thank you for reading
Blood-wolf
Morgan
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Comments
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wow this poem really paints the picture and i made wanna cry well written
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this is beautiful. you did an amazing job. your rhyming was beautiful and it went perfectly with the wonderful words you wrote. im sure you will definatley place in the contest, how couls you not with a poem such as yours? with such beauty and love and truth. it is completely moving and spectacular. fantastic job, i greatly enjoyed reading your fantastic work.
Liz
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An interesting and insightful take on the "if you love someone, let them go," idea. The rhyme flows well and thankfully does not seem to constrain the message. Good job and thanks for entering!
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I love this poem, especially the rhyming scheme you chose to use. It reminded me a bit of A Midsummer Night's Dream. You can really feel the emotion and it conveys a moral in its few short verses. Great job!
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My heart got heavier and heavier as I read this and yes my eyes slightly welled. Thing is this isn't really fiction, things like this do happen especially to rock climbers and the such. You have also changed my mind on a certain issue! Good job poet
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Beautiful
It was worth the time put into it, because it has brought me to tears. Very rare does a piece bring me to tears. I just wrote a poem and It was basically saying that a current love is not the type of love; like your poem describes. I do believe and I think to many don't and often settle. You did great with the flow and it has a great visual as well as captive suspense. AWESOME JOB!!!!!!
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WOW
thiz iz amazing... i absolutely luv it therez so much emotion behind it your an amazing poet
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O.O O M G!
THIS IS SO FRIGGEN BEAUTIFUL!!! I was nearly to tears and I wanted to keep reading more and more. You are a GREAT poet and I would absolutley LOVE to read more of your work! This poem just absolutley captured me. I could actually see the cliff and the two people with their straw hats. I'm absolutley amazed. I will not be suprised if you become a famous poet in the future. A job well done, my friend, a job well done!
-Kristy-
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whoaaa!!!
OMG, i was stunned once i started reading i didnt want it to end, it was very good, i felt the love, i believe in love but i started to give it up, but as i read this i know that love is still out there, an thats the kind of love i want. this is very beautiful.
keep up the terrific work.
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dis is really good...wow...i finally got to c my girl for the first time in 4 months....and I've got to tell you dis poem really explains a lot in words shown and hidden what love is truly meant to mean....great job
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This rhyme is nearly flawless.
Love is true, no matter what age you are. I know this for a definite.
I adore this.
Brilliant write, I mean that from the heart
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wow
this is an amazing read..gripping and sad..i had to read it twice..excellent
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awww... this is a very lovely poem.. i loved it, very beautifully written...soo sad. and this poem would totally confince someone that love is not fake! BRAVO
~Sam -
damn straight
this is reeeeallly good since it brought tears to my usually dry eyes... sniff
My heart now aches for the love of my life, because I know he would do this for me, and I for him....
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Awesome, and certainly proof if needed love is real
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I'm convinced, i enjoyed the read, best of luck in the contest and take care
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awesome.....i was always hanged between the 2 opinions about love but i guess you were really good at convincing your readers with your point of view...nice job....
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lovely...I almost cried, it was very touching and sweet.
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I like this but I choose to think of this in not the literal sense but in a metaphorical way, if I may: I see this as sometimes your lover loves you so much they can see the harm they are doing to you by staying or even the poetential for harm they can do to you by staying. They know you deserve a better life than what they can offer you so instead of draggin you down with them they choose to let you go or force you to let them go. My ex told me "Let me Go, I tried to give yout he hint the first time but you chose not to see and continued to hold on". Sometimes someone loves us enough to let us go. Wow that is powerful a very powerful think to think about and this poem has helped me tremendously in believing that and coming to that conclusion. Oh my, I thank you so much for solidifying what I thought I knew but to see it in this form was awesome, this is bookmarked for future reading. Thank you Blood wolf
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stunning write. this is so wonderful!! best of luck in the contest, tho you probably wont need it!!
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Absolutely beautiful write.
I love the flow-
The story-
These lines I adore,
"and as his love for her was strong,
he knew she was worth it all along,
so he knew what he must do,
and let her fingers now slip through,"
Wonderful...
I'm glad I came to read. ;D
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