Her gowns were as red as the rose
She sings of words nobody knows
Her gowns were as red as the rose
As she dances the love in the air grows
Her gowns were as red as the rose
In the soft dawn light her skin glows
Her gowns were as red as the rose
As the music ends, her dance she slows
Her gowns were as red as the rose
She takes the rose in her hands and blows
Her gowns were as red as the rose
In the breeze, many a rose petal flows
Her voice is as fair as the skies
The pink dawn gradually dies
Her dance ends in one last pose
Her gowns were as the rose
Author notes
Credit: http://anarasha.deviantart.com/art/Rose-53571849
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Bis Repetita
Her gowns were as red as the rose
perhaps Her gowns were red as rose though in this case tense should be maintained thus danced rather than dances. Perhaps the third line of the first three verses could be rewritten without the repetition ?
The first couplet of the fourth verse is effective through modifying the monorhyme elsewhere
... consider rephrasing
The pink dawn gradually dies
Her dance ends in one last pose
With her dance's final pose ? -
good luck hun you penned a rose
Hugs Angel♥
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