I peered through his eyes,
Realizing another held his affections.
-Betraying impulse.
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Prompt: From a Distance
10-15 words
In a list
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Wow great take on the prompt this was amazing
It's awesome how so many people can say so much in so few words Thank you so much for entering my contest and Good luck
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good imagery drawn through a few lines.
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Wow. I like this one! I like the last line.
The only thing I would say is that you might wanna as "I" before peered and "and" after "eyes" . I feel like I kinda jumped into the poem instead of easing into it. It would help with the flow.
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Nicely done, In a few words, caputed a lot...
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very emotion driven and profound with meaning... x
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oooo... Icy Nice.
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Excellent take on the prompt.
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