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Kaleidoscope Girl

when it's white;

  I wish I was white.
filled with a ray of light bringing nothing but good times and happy days,
watching the world with eyes of  innocence.
Some say White is the colour of perfection...
[I'm far from perfect ~ maybe that's why I'm never white.]

you get the orange glow;

Sometimes I'm orange.
I've gained enthusiasm for a life  filled with happiness
determined to do anything to achieve success of my dreams.
Some say Orange is the colour of creativity...

[in my mind I've created the perfect fantasy world with random orange glow days].

soon it burns red;

Sometimes I'm red.
day's filled of pain and anger and hurt.
A war of words and so many draw blood with their tongue.
Living with the feeling of a fire raging through my head.
Some say Red is the colour of love...

[I see red a lot, I don't see love && personally I fail to make the connection.]

turns to purple

Sometimes I'm purple.
Full of passion and romance everything makes me smile
  there's that one special person that has made life worth living
 a time where everything is brilliant and together we can create a new world.
Some say Purple is the colour of mystery...

[Life is full of mysterious happenings so I can agree with that.]


but then it's blue;

sometimes I'm blue.
and I'm laying by the sea staring at the sky just thinking about life,
watching the colours change in the wind like a chameleon.
Confidant in my thoughts that one day it will all be stable.
Some say Blue is the colour of trust and loyalty...

[I've never been shown loyalty and I don't know how to show trust.]

soon growing green;

Sometimes I'm green.
bringing jealousy and greed and hate,
I can see now why I've become so jaded and depressed with my surroundings.
Some say Green is the colour of ambition...

[my ambition is to survive each day as it come, I guess they could be right]

fade to black;

Often I'm Black.
Then the power of the evilness of the real world becomes so clear.
my head is filled with the mysteries
of a
world full of corrupt views and judgmental people
bringing darkness and confusion.

Some say Black is the colour of death ...
[i've seen lots of black ~ i'm not sure if its death but it's definitely evil.]

Colour Splash;

I'm just a lonely girl
trying to make my way through this dark world

and sometimes when I feel I just want to cry
~
I watch the view with kaleidoscope eyes
then I become a colourful girl
living it large in a rainbow world
&&
it's a colour splash
of
memories && dreams.

[Don't stop this rainbow trip I never want to leave]






Author notes

Was so hard to define myself in Colour
Thanks for the Challenge
I am
a
Kaleidoscope Girl

living all the colours of the rainbow

hope you liked it
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  • mgmc gold member
    September 10

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    A very colorful poem. Great title. The background and font colors enhance the poem. I love the ending stanza of the poem. It pulls everything together so well!


  • Rick Weston silver member
    August 31

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    seeing thru your kaleidoscope i suspect we are all mostly varied colors thru our lives and often even thru our days. an interesting engaging poem you have shared. well done.

  • I like the way you've set this out, the fact that you've used the colours to describe yourself.

    I love the picture in the background too.

    White- I like that you've said what white represents to you, and then decided that you cannot be. Yet, I think there's a part of everyone that longs to be...

    Orange is awesome.
    Orange for creativity... never throught of that. Yet, I can see it in there...

    Red- Now that is my favourite colour...
    Drawing blood with the tongue..? Like it!!
    I do that daily, it gets me in serious trouble...

    Purple being mystery? Interesting viewpoint... I would say the darker shades would be... And I agree too, only I have a serious lack of one person.

    I'm loving your little asides at the end of each stanza. I also don't know how to trust. People are so good at breaking it!
    Yet if blue was the colour of loyalty, I too, can be blue.

    Green. Loved the last two lines of this stanza.

    And then it's all tied together with a variety of colour...
    A rainbow girl...trapped in a kaleidoscope world.

    A finalist!

  • IntimidusRex silver member
    August 28

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    color me

    This is quite a piece, I'm amazed you were able to desribe (my guess is yourself) in such an expressive and I might add a colourful way. This is a very expressive way to view and write. I applaud your efforts this is a great piece. The first and last lines in your last stanza are my favorites. I watch the view with kaleidescope eye.
    (Don't stop this rainbow trip I never want to get off)

  • Remarkable

    This was amazing, honestly just im so speachless, great detailed images you've put into others minds, probably the best thing ive read in a while, great job.. NEVER stop writing because if you do you will lose a great talent..

  • mhwillingham
    August 19

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    Great imagery. I could feel the emotion of your poem getting stronger with each change of color. My favorite line was:
    "Sometimes I'm blue.
    and I'm laying by the sea staring at the sky just thinking about life..."
    I like the way you used nature to explain your emotions reacting to the color blue. For some reason that really stood out to me. One typo I see is the third line of your "orange" stanza, you seem to have a renegade "a". Other than that, great job. I really enjoyed it.


  • AndreaChanel
    August 19

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    every hue of color brought the poem to life! it was rather vivid and bright both literally and figuratively! great job!


  • MidnightxSun
    August 19

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    A novel I idea for a poem, and I can see you put quite a bit of thought into it. I personally prefer rhyme, but a good attempt at free verse!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    August 19

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    A very introspective poem, thoughtfully and attractively formed

    A splendid attempt at a difficult prompt.

    great stuff

    Jeff


  • jamesfox85
    August 19
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    hey

    very deep x


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    August 19

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    I don't know whether to cry or STAND UP and APPLAUD YOU For
    Releasing those AWESOME COLORS of your Soul!

    Sweet poetess...

    I am in awe of you!
    humble, humbled.
    ears2hearyou

    WE the Gluttons of Punishment
    Salute your Heart and Spirit of PURE COURAGE.....

    and please remember that the color black
    can also soothe...in the dark we can't see
    and we have to learn to trust each other

    and ask for help when we need it!
    Sometimes in the dark people are truly honest with their thoughts.

    We dear sister...will..always be hear for you!
    YOU ARE A Beautiful sister!


    ears/Seattle

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