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Dark Clouds

How can one cloud cover all the light?
Why does the sun disappear to make way for storms?

Invisibility never sounded so wonderful.
Why do I need a voice, really?
All my words fail to grasp attention.

"Don't give up yet," I hear you..
I swear, I'm trying my best.
Something, anything, has to give.

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  • Ellek
    August 18
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    This is great, baby!! Don't give up yet! I love you!