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Dropped Lunch.




laughing
at my dropped lunch
a seagull






Andrew Hide
31~03~2004

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Written March 31st, 2004

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  • MargaretG
    April 25, 2004
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    Fantastic

    I know that seagull laughter! A great haiku moment!


  • Kalima
    April 14, 2004
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    Im not good with commenting on haikus but this was different but in a good way... frpm imagine27


  • Ava Noire silver member
    April 4, 2004
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    Ha ha this is great . I love those birds and how they will stand around you on the beach hoping for something to eat. While I was on my honeymoon a few years back, my new hubby and I were eating ice cream and those birds kept sqwaking at us for a bite of our cones. lol

    Enjoyable haiku


  • Manicmuze
    April 1, 2004
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    LOL... love it :-)

    Great little poem,
    ~ Wendy


  • haikumonk gold member
    April 1, 2004
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    fine write Andrew........ and a funny one as well........... where I live it would have been a crow!!! lol


  • BillS2
    April 1, 2004
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    Very nice

    Hi Andrew:
    Well, the Seagull could be the lucky recipient of such a disaster, or at least part of it. Simple words, good observations and a wonderful Haiku. Good luck in this contest, you have done a very nice write. Bill

  • polgara
    March 31, 2004
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    It brought a smile to my face, Andrew. I know that laugh...it's almost diabolical... right before they swoop in for the kill, those greedy gluts. It's not so much they are laughing *at* you--it's more "ha ha ha it's MINE MINE MINE!!!" LOL. Fantastic haiku (as always )

  • Essence13
    March 31, 2004
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    THis was very...unique. Ha i love it, the end was funny, just so random. Great write, keep up the good work!


  • Etoile de Tir
    March 31, 2004
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    hehe. Awesome image represented. Seagulls can be brutal when there is food to be had. Good job. Keep it up!

    Mal

  • Billbard silver member
    March 31, 2004
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    Andrew.Nice word picture.I am quite often surrounded by laughing shrieking seagulls when cleaning fish I catch off of my backyard dock.Sometimes Pelicans visit too.Enjoyed.Bill.


  • SusanL
    March 31, 2004
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    hehehehe Two in a row...Clever chap you are Andrew!!


  • March 31, 2004
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    I'd just pick it up and carry on, posh git that i am


  • Blue moon
    March 31, 2004
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    A great write here well done, keep writting


  • Kitesen
    March 31, 2004
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    BTW a nice picture not your garden I hope


  • Kitesen
    March 31, 2004
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    This is amazing not only for the seagul (sorry)
    But a sharp observation *

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