I love the words upon your mind that speak aloud
I love the lines of yesterday on you
Your eyes fulfill a mirror; your mirror
Your lips announce a welcome smile, always
Your hands never fail to leave something better
Your hair never gets out of your eyes... let me get that for you
Your skin is so translucent, it makes you look lovely, I swear
But despite the rigid years that have passed you and I for a lifetime...
I still see, receive, and give the love of our youth, still evergreen.
And that is simply why I love you, now and for always; eternally.
Author notes
Random point of view: what if we're all old and stuff and our special other is still there? Will our feelings fade into nothing like a simple infatuation... or will our love stay alive like a burning candle?
Just a thought. xD I think that I spilled my heart in for whomever spoke through me today. lol. 
I'd love to give these peeps a name, so just give me a pair of names -- or make some yourself. (It's an old couple, for goodness' sake!)
Still writing,
~Meli
What do you see? What is it to be?
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loved it
yea i know the feeling look at my poem tears ok -
Nicely done!
its swift but sweet. i like it
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Thankies. :3
I'm thinking about going through my old poetry and changing some aspects, but... yeh, this one's sweet (and it's not as dark as my other stuff xD which is a good thing, I guess).
Lol's! I wrote too much.
Anywho, thankies for the comment. :]
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nice
The sentiment is nice the words are somehow awkward. The first two start with I love and then you have several your's followed by three stand alone's I guess in poetry anything can claim the name but it is not all poetic. How can a mirror be fulfilled? Do you mean the person is reflecting the writers emotions? Instead of 'But' say 'And yet'. And finally I would say:
Simplicity defined I love you, now and always; eternally
I am not sure names would work you would have to change the poem completely.
But I like Able and Hannah. Good solid pioneer/Amish names. -
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Thanks! It was just a short for the day, nothing too serious about it.
I'll edit in a few days (got College to go to now... ^___^).
Thankies, MeKaBa! *bows to thee*
~Meli
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