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Exhale

Missing image

Shattered, swaying In the spiral of descent

Weeping In silence on the shores of eternity

Spectral voices echo ancient warnings

~Out of the ashes let us rise~

Weeping In silence, ..

I am here, waiting where there Is neither

light nor dark, just the crimson laced silence

of a final exhale

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  • Carolina Moon gold member
    August 25

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    You said you wouldn't write about how I'm feeling lol Seriously, a good write my friend, but you always do dark brilliantly. Nice work and keep it up!!!


    • Deceits Tears silver member
      August 25
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      Thankyou petal, Aww I do hope your not feelin toooo bad and the dark is good heheh, well for me anywayz....Hope all Is well with you my friend and thanks for your nice comment and your visit


  • individuality gold member
    August 20

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    a good poem... and breathe. release the sighs; as red as dawn's death. and slip off the masks while the ash crumbles. fan the flames of existence with another swoop of air.


    • Deceits Tears silver member
      August 20
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      Fan the flames of existence with another swoop of air......seeeee poetry in your comments, LOL I love it


  • redmoonnrizing silver member
    August 19

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    Sheer beauty within lay these lines. If I knew how to make the little "bowing" dude I would put a hundred on here LOL.....Brilliant!


    • Deceits Tears silver member
      August 19
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      Lol I just read your comment thankyou very much you are always so kind and encouraging


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    August 18

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    You floored me with this one. I was thinking about the differences in the way you and I write. Your poems burst with color and emotion. In comparison, mine are dull facts that rhyme.

    Great job. I admire your talent.

    Mike


    • Deceits Tears silver member
      August 19
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      My friend, there Is nothin at all dull about your writes Personally I love to read the history ones like I tell you I learn as I go and yours are great...and the pieces you do for Steph....well hell Mike any woman would be touched to get that, sorry but I have to argue with you this time, Ha !
      Thankyou so much for your kind comment tho

      PS Kiwi 1
      Woodchuck zip

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