A bunch of clichés by leander at All poetry

I was but unkempt soil -

a wasteland

littered with scraps

of swooning sentiments

and remains of 'I',

once found in unity.

Then suddenly,

out of the deepest blue

living in me -

I realized

that nothing in life worth getting

comes easy.

Since then...

"My mouth grows clichés

like roses

and crystal towers;

My lips birth words

like sparkle

and sunset;

My hands build a garden

for you to bloom."

Belief came back to me

(and I've been thinking about it).

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Best Prewrites From August 2009 by amaranthine lover. 1300 points, ended September 26, 29 entries
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poet2angels
September 26
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PS...oh and congrats on the bronze!
poet2angels
September 26
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I somehow missed this jewel...
I have almost run out of words to express how amazing your work is...

Lynda
amaranthine lover
September 26
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22.95 / 25
I love how daring you can always be with your wording.
Clovis...Curious
September 16

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Superb Plus
I really like this write, exactly as you have expressed your thoughts. Your imagery is most excellent. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
Zephyr the Red
August 26

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Cool
I LOVE this part. And though I don't like to copy and paste. I can't get that fancy e . So here it is! My favorite part!
"My mouth grows clichés
like roses
and crystal towers;"

Crystal towers.
Now that's pretty righteous
Is that how it's spelled?
Can I get a spell check pleeeeeease?
I just love it! ^.^
Anyway...
Keep your chin up!
Where would we be if everything was just handed to us?
Our every fight is what made us
peluche
August 25

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As usual, your work is amazing. The message is clear and the word choice worked so well. I love the last line of this poem. I found it to be much more effective the way you left it. I need to think a lot about this message myself. I am glad to read any words by you after such a long absence. I hope to "see" a lot more of you soon. Take care my friend.

Martha
Mari Goes
August 19

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Cliché away dear one! You do whatever you do always so well. And it isn't 'If only' but 'someday'
LadyUnique
August 19

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i shall be cliche and say 'love this'

seriously... this gave me a big smile and that's my fav way to start the day
Nicolette
August 19

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as long as you believe....AND keep writing poetry ike this, leander. few can write so-called "cliches" as well as you do and do it so originally!

~ Nicolette
Yemassee
August 19

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It's better to believe again (in love or whatever) than to write with originality. Let the cliches flow, let them speak with the syrupy sounds that make you smile, rather than frown. I'm not sure the soul wants to live off metaphors and abstract thoughts anyway...sometimes it needs what reveals it, not what disguises it...Not that I really know anything about it.
Poetic Tasha
August 18

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YAY LEea-bum
dikke knuffel! i am soooooo happy about all of this for you [which you already know lol] I so LOVE this write, this could be me writing this,
my mouth is always spewing cliches and things about sparkles and sunsets! LOL in fact just last night i told someone i was given back the sparkle in my eyes
and you too!!! yayayayayaya!

isn't it nice to believe and have faith again!? love it, love your style, love this write, love you

Tasha