And, rising, bless the Cimmerian shade of night
With cupped snowflake-skin flowing, bathed in sultry rebirth
Praise the darkness that impregnated your essence with light.
Now permeated with scent of ashes, grasp with might
the memories of a child once holy in its innocence of mirth
And, rising, bless the Cimmerian shade of night.
And gaze raptly, effervescent, drunk with flight –
into the Neverwere of existence that soured your birth
Praise the darkness that impregnated your essence with light.
When young, you were all-ignorance – in lack of sorrow, bright
Smote the mocking fruit of knowledge: caress with stable blaze the earth
And, rising, bless the Cimmerian shade of night.
With scars that unfurl like ribbons of wings you will alight
Entwine your luminescence with those unmarred before the curse –
Praise the darkness that impregnated your essence with light.
You misconstrued the pain that seared, but now you fight
No longer complacent, idle –embrace the warrior death brought forth
And, rising, bless the Cimmerian shade of night –
Praise the darkness that impregnated your essence with light.
Author notes
*Inspired by Dylan Thomas's "Do Not Go Gently Into That Good Night".
A contest entry
- PIF Contest by Nevel by Nevel.
1100 points, ended October 9, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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which form???read the rules plzz
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First, I would suggest you to remove the spaces between the lines of each stanza. Interesting diction you used, warrior-like? In a Villanelle each second line should rhyme...."curse" and "forth" doesn't rhyme with the previous end-words of the second lines. You add some big themes in your poem, I like that. I enjoyed your poem. Thank you for entering my contest.
Erwin
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I was a bit loose with the rhyme because I hate rigidity in poetry but thank you.
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thats oke, I'm sure you will find the right rhyming-words.
actually you may not chat with the judge during a contest 
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Great poem, good message
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