Look in my eyes
You'll see love for you
But does your heart says
You love me too
I love you as the stars
love the sky
I love you with each moment
that passes by
I need you to need me
The way I need you
I need you to survive
You make me feel alive
I need you as the moon
needs light
I need you as the sun
needs to make a day bright
I need you as the flower
needs the rain
I need you so much
I can't explain
You taught me
to smile
but not how to feel
when you leave for a while
You taught me
how to be strong
But not what to do
when things went wrong
Darling you may be out of reach
But always in my heart
I'm missing the air I breathe
When we're apart
Darling you may be far away
But every single night
I could still feel your kiss
It take me to invincible heights
I learn to love you
To be honest and kind
I learn to forgive and forget
But you are always on my mind
A contest entry
- AP Best friend by schoolsable.
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The sweet and sour of love...very well penned with honest emotion and deep loving sentiments.
Thank you for the entry.
Az
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very beautiflu and heartfelt! i love all of the metaphors and similes! great job! Good luck in my contest
~Sam -
What a beautiful love poem. I loved the ryhming is was very well done and written with such passion and feeling
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This is beautiful.. I love the stanza
'You thought me
to smile
but not how to feel
when you leave for a while'
Just one thing I couldn't help noticing (as you wanted constructive critisism) is I think you meant 'taught' instead of 'thought'? Just a spelling error!
Otherwise its a lovely write, so sweet and heartfelt, thank you for sharing!!
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awww, i love all of this..
i completely understand the feelings and feel them too
nice simple rhyme, lovely
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