Reminiscent of my dreams in this picture
To many times have I found myself trapped
in this maze, devoid of light
alone, empty
forever wandering
always wondering
always wanting
prepared for a dawn
which may never come
To many times have I awoken here
scared, helpless and frayed
wondering if my life is meant for this
I pull up my hood, draw tight my cloak
seated at the beginning
ready to begin the journey again
In hopes I will find my way out
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This is lovely. It read very much like Evanescence lyrics, or something to that effect; soothing and light, yet profound.
Don't forget your commas and fullstops! On a whole, your punctuation could use some work; I notice that, a couple of times, you've use the wrong "to". There are three different ones, and they are:
-"To" is a preposition, as in, "we're going TO Bratislava" or, "are you going TO help me with the dishes".
-"Too" is a modifier, also the correct form for "TOO many times"; and
-"Two" is the number (2).
They all sound the same, so it's important to be aware of this. If you're ever unsure, just ask me.
Other than that pesky detail, well done & keep writing!
Laura
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They say:
Judge of your natural character by what you do in your dreams.
Beautiful write, i look forward to reading more by you.
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