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a muse



he manipulated words with bukowski fingertips
thrusting his reality into my creativeness,
still flowing with juices from the original sin.

his pauses hid in my curves
and moans vibrated syllable’s stutter~
he quietly stared his sapphire firmament into my emerald ocean

spinning sunset upon my unblemished skin.

I begged for more,
and as his shepherd’s staff guided me to my knees,
he whispered the next verse into my void...

until I was inspired.




Author notes

quote inspired:
'You painted blush on my skin, where adoration met sin'
- Alice J. Baldwin (Auburn Sunrise)

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  • poet2angels gold member
    September 26

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    Wow

    I see why this won gold!
    Congrats! This is amazing

    Lynda


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    September 26
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    23.75 / 25

    amazing darling.


    • sweet arrival gold member
      September 26
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      thank you and for the gold. that means so much coming from an amazing writer like you


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    August 22

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    For some reason this made me think of Matt E. Smith - like maybe he's the muse. Maybe it was the Bukowski and his uncanny way of inspiring others with his poetry? LOL. I don't know...

    You did an EXCELLENT job with this prompt! Seriously! The way you twisted it to make poetry the focus instead of painting (and how the hell did you do that? lol) ... I'm just super impressed.

    Very sensual, erotic, inspirational, and just... nice... all at the same time.

    You really do have a unique handle on words and the English language. I love that.

    • sweet arrival gold member
      August 23
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      LMAO... matt? he is a great poet, and im sure certainly inspires many to write. lol. it just made me laugh how you put that there. lol... seriously.

      i admire your writing, so to receive a compliment like this encourages me to keep on writing.


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    August 21

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    Fantastic!!

    I stand in awe of your mighty muse's pen... and I'm wishing you all the best in the contest!! Keep it flowing, Poet!!
    Peace & Hugs,
    xx Cyn xx


  • c0n
    August 19

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    wow

    i can practically see everything ur talkin about......sexy very sexy


  • xxvampyregirlxx
    August 19

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    This is really amazing. I love the Imagery you put into this it paints a very vivid picture in the readers mind. You're words flow perfectly.

    he manipulated words with bukowski fingertips
    thrusting his reality into my creativeness,
    still flowing with juices from the original sin.

    definatly my favorite part. Amazing write!


  • DumbBaby
    August 19
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    smile.. thats a sexy muse : ) beautiful poem too.


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    August 19

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    manipulation grows as you give in to it. it feeds on your weaknesses. This is such a wonderfull write and have inspired a contest. Keep your eyes wide open because i would love for you to enter it


  • Garmond gold member
    August 19

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    You really do manage to get so much value from the words you choose. It is all because of your mastery in using them though. This can be read on so many levels, but all of them are seductive in their own way. You have this unique ability to write sexually, explicity even, without actually writing anything definitive about sex. That doesn't even make sense... but it is perfectly true none-the-less.
    Always with eloquence and class and mastery though.
    You make what seems complex to me.... seem as though it was effortless for you.
    Clear the mantle for another impending trophy

    • sweet arrival gold member
      August 19
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      i dont know how to thank you for such wonderful comments. you have a way of making me smile from the inside out. i can feel that rush and it has to have an escape and before i know it, i am smiling.


  • Alive Again
    August 19
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    i really like this.


  • stef-witt gold member
    August 19

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    This is beautiful. SO sensual, if not a little bit dominant... The phrasing you've used is really wonderful. It flows really freely from one verse to the next - and the ending line is perfect. I have NO criticism! This is great! Thanks for sharing!

  • J Macabre gold member
    August 19

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    That's certainly different...i like your word usage and sense of metaphor. Great job...good luck in the contest.


  • Andi. gold member
    August 18
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    thank the heavens for muses
    well done ...


  • Allyce May gold member
    August 18

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    Ooo, mixing poetry and sexuality. What could be more perfect?! Maybe adding food into the mix

    Some great alliteration in this by the way: syllable's stutter/shepherd's staff.

    I enjoyed the fact that this maintained simplicity and direction while being interwoven with chic imagery

    • sweet arrival gold member
      August 18
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      definitely some good italian or chinese cuisine would be yummy with some merlot maybe... hmmm. how can i work that in there? lol. thank you for taking the time to stop by, read and leave your mark


  • heron
    August 18

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    Gutsy poem

    A poem full of vision and rich enough for my imagination to wonder and enjoy this work!


  • foreveryourslove
    August 18
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    that was a speachless poem


  • Darkend
    August 18

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    Wow. I had to read this piece a second time. It takes my breath away; the imagery is simply stunning. I must say this is the second work of yours I've read today and your writing in itself is an inspiration and is elaborate and full of surprises. I look forward to more!


  • jazzcat gold member
    August 18

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    Such imagery, vibrant, fun, intense and sensual; I love your ability to paint pictures without beating the reader over the head with the obvious. Of course, I love the Bukowski reference and the last line really adds an exclamation point to all that proceeded it. Muses come in many forms...whatever it takes to be inspired.

    • sweet arrival gold member
      August 18
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      yep... whatever it takes, eh? lol. i started this and then the muse took it in a completely other direction. glad you liked it


  • awannabepoet
    August 18

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    Muse is what a muse will be this one seems quite inspirational I would have to agree.

    For me the muse that lives in me is female, she is all about pain and love and all things in between but then there are days when she turns even the shadows of ice storms into Fire and brimstone and when that happens look out oh ye old male muse for nothing can stand the wrath of a woman twice scorned.

    Know we not this oh so well.

    Yet still I must say I love your muse, he is quite the sexual being now isn't he.

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    August 18

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    holy canole... I think I might have to head to the salvation army today and see if they won't swap my muse for a male muse, no dang wonder my writes don't stack up to yours... heck now it all makes sense! I got the wrong dang kind of muse... mine is female... [smacks herself on the forehead] ...I should have figured this out long ago! Yep, I'm a gonna go see if I can go trade mine in for one of them thar good uns! lol

    Spendid imagery dear. I wouldn't expect anything less from you. You deliver perfection every single time I click on your writes. Few can ever really be called a
    true poet, but you dear have earned that title. Well done POET!

    Hugs,

    Suzi

    • sweet arrival gold member
      August 18
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      suzi, i always make want to give you a big hug after i read your comments. how can i ever stop writing with you in my corner? you are wonderful. thank you


  • Uniquely-Scarred
    August 18

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    this is great you did well with the prompt, take care and the best of luck in the contest


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 18

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    After reading that.. I want a male muse!!! lol.. mine seems to be female and she is off whoring it around, the little tramp!

    This is gorgeously sensual without being crass, and perfect for the prompt!


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    August 17

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    awesome write. I know exactly what you mean


  • DolceVito gold member
    August 17

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    Brilliant Oh, and sorry I fell asleep soon afterwards JK; superb poetry, Buk-worthy stuff


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    August 17

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    well, fuck.

    I love this. Your muse is awesome lol

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